Unpolished

(Unpolished is My Language for unfinished) I write this yesterday in guitar class. I speak in generalities here, folks, don't take it too seriously.

I am quite pained for reasons unknown

My heart aches as it beats against rib bones

I love not and am not loved

I shove away and in turn not shoved

Sitting by my lonesome with occassional words

I prefer lonliness, I'd like to be alone in this world

 

(That's all I've got so far....it's pretty crappy if you ask me)

Reviews

[HorrorMaster]

Very good poem

[Dylan Cook]

It's a good idea, just needs to be fleshed out more as u say