Ruse

Ruse

A Poem by b.platte

Follow your fantasies down a dark road

putting all of your inhibitions on hold

follow it to your hearts greatest desire

only to end up in a padlock gridiron

a girl a girl! An aesthetic so sweet

from the tip of her head to her tolerable feet

embodiment of perfection so I haggle and plea

to half of my heart the guard is eager to agree

then he sets her monstrous, heartless rampage loose

I drown in her, naivety, didn't take her long to seduce

I find myself trapped in a misty facade

full of deceit and a painted smiled to which I applaud

I've been hooked, dragged, and caught on a whim

another half of my heart and I break free toward the grim

despair and muffled mourning from the lack of two souls

my own with no heart and of course the disguised troll's

who trotted away minus a soul but my heart

only to reach home and tear it apart

© 2012 b.platte


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Wonderful flow and very well written i like this alot.

Posted 12 Years Ago


b.platte

12 Years Ago

;) you reviewed this twice. lol
sierrasparks91

12 Years Ago

ik lol its just that good
b.platte

12 Years Ago

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Mia
Do you watch 'So you think you can dance'? If I was Mary Murphy...I would be screaming "WOOOOOOOOOHOOOOOOOOO! YOU'RE ON THE HOT TAMALE TRAIN!!!!"
This is great! You're just a gem!
"from the tip of her head to her tolerable feet
embodiment of perfection so I haggle and plea
to half of my heart the guard is eager to agree"

Posted 12 Years Ago


b.platte

12 Years Ago

I've watched it. lol. Thanks so much! That's freaking awesome.
Mia

12 Years Ago

This was freaking awesome :D
b.platte

12 Years Ago

:)
this gave me goosebumps good job

Posted 12 Years Ago


b.platte

12 Years Ago

:)
Ooh...facade and applaud. That's good use of words right there. I have to make a note of that for future reference some time lol Other than the generally pleasant nature of your writing, pacing, rhythm and technique, this was also a really good poem content wise. So many understand this feeling. As always, I'm an avid fan of your poetry. Thanks for sharing this ^^

Posted 12 Years Ago


b.platte

12 Years Ago

Yesss. :) Thanks!
MachinaWriter

12 Years Ago

Oh, btw I've made a compilation in the form of a book called A Tragic Story. If you get the time I'd.. read more
b.platte

12 Years Ago

I've already gotten started on the first chapter ;)
LOVE IT!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


b.platte

12 Years Ago

:D
Brilliant sturcture and rhyme. I would say change the "2" for the word "two". It just makes it flow better. But apart from that a great poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


b.platte

12 Years Ago

Okay, thanks :)
I love the words that you rhymed. I always adore your choice of words. You're a wonderful writer, keep it up. (:

Posted 12 Years Ago


b.platte

12 Years Ago

Thank you :)
The ryming flowed well. It was good!

Posted 12 Years Ago


b.platte

12 Years Ago

Thank you
I really liked the rhythm and rhyme, as well as the story it told. Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


b.platte

12 Years Ago

thank you :)

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Added on August 19, 2012
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