Otis

Otis my dear, if you're here, watch
me as i write, and guide this pen
across this paper...
My darkness closes in on me.
I feel alone in this hell.
There's silence everywhere,
no one to talk to, no one
that would understand me.
So master, i say control
me... Not all the time,
but most of all the time.
When you escape me
leave nothing but memories
and scars. Remember to trap
my heart so far out of
this wasteland, so it can
be protected from being hurt.
So when someone asks me,"don't you have a heart?'
I reply,"No i gave up on it a long time ago." Feed
my soul to our brothers and sisters.

Reviews

[ImagineItAll]

I must say, I am very surprised that someone as young as you can write like this. This was very, very good. The way you talk about pain is wonderful. This was very creative: "So master, i say control
me... Not all the time,
but most of all the time.
When you escape me
leave nothing but memories
and scars. Remember to trap
my heart so far out of
this wasteland, so it can
be protected from being hurt."

Keep it up!

[Akemi Polino]

Thank you so much! It means alot

[Roze Collions]

wow i love this its great your only 15 and you do this kind of work

[DontBlink158]

really good, again nice write.. i cant think of anything else to say but i liked it

[NeonWolves]

This is very nice. When I read it I picture like Misa from Death Note. Nice work. I enjoyed it. ^.^

[Akemi Polino]

Thank you sooo much! xD Hehe Just call me Akemi ;p

[Jacey Poison Girl]

I agree very good it reminds me of Death Note

[Kiari Sabon]

:D love it hahaha very good