Too Old For Butterflies

Oh the infatuation!

The soft skin

On his collarbones

On his forearms

The backs of his ankles

Just wanting to touch

With my fingertips

Trailing

Mapping

Imagining

Smooth places

Ive yet to find

 

When he looks

Directly into my eyes

Im locked in his gaze

Unable to see

Anything else

Speechless

Just searching

For words

Too soon to say

 

Tossing around

Some breathless kisses

Wed been saving all night

On our lips

For this moment

Hearts pounding

I walk home

Staggering

Sober

Yet completely

Intoxicated

Reviews

[Fra/c/ture]

ive been reading down through all your pieces and this one really stuck out. its tone was much different than the rest. it made me happy to know that despite some of the low times depicted in other pieces there were some pretty high ones here. you do a nice job of getting that sexual and sensual frenzy down in words. that's not an easy thing to do, to capture the glances, the strokes, the wanting to engulf someone else and be totally engulfed as well....

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A beautiful romantic poem. Lovely. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[No one]

This reminded me of dark porches, creaking porch swings, and my teeth crashing into someone else's.

Thanks for sharing. You did well to paint the picture of young passion.

I felt this whole part like it was a memory---->Tossing around
Some breathless kisses
Wed been saving all night
On our lips
For this moment
Hearts pounding
I walk home
Staggering
Sober
Yet completely
Intoxicated

[Rain]

Yea, I will be reading alot of your work. Some writing I like, some writing I like, because I love the feeling I'm left with after I read. I'll return in the morning. It's like finding a cool, islolated place to be alone.. Rain..

Good form and choice of words. This poem also flows very well.

The message and insight was well imparted along with good imagery.

This is a good piece

[Angelic Darkness]

This was a cute poem. I loved the
way that one line ran into the other, flowing
so gracefully.