The knife of the backstabber

A soothing blunt on one side,

But with a sharpened edge behind.

Sharpened by the mind’s baggage,

A deadly weapon, in a form that no one can find.

Unsheathed once a ‘friend’ turns his back,

To be as convincing as one can be.

Unleashed; then its swift in its attack,

Alas, such damage is inflicted, yet no eye can see.

 

If only we had eyes behind,

To spot the cut that bleeds within.

Behold the knife of a backstabber,

The deadliest weapon that I haven’t seen. 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[apennylate]

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The deadliest weapon I have not seen... A silently cutting ending... Very succinct rhyme scheme choice, and it makes for a cutting display of talent on the backbite of betrayal... The damage is inflicted, but who can even see...

[Chrys Marie]

The message is exquisitely entwined with your words. A stunning piece about a grim subject. This one really resounded with me. Brilliant work!

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you for the review Chrys

[Ghania]

Nothing's more dangerous than a Fake person.
Amazingly weaved into words. :))
Beware of the backstabbers!

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank your for the 'honest' review :P >>
I hate fake people the most in life.

[Ghania]

............:)))

[Jenny]

What an enjoyable read! The ending is my absolute favorite. And the language that you used is so fitting. It has wonderful flow as well. Thank you for sharing! ~J

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thanks for the review Jenny.. And welcome back :)

[Jenny]

You're welcome and thanks! I always love reading your writing!

[Ashwin Shanker]

Glad to hear that Jenny...

[pia]

a beautiful poem about back stabber and their effects on the friend who they wrong.
one always has to stay aware of snakes and fake friends lol

[Ashwin Shanker]

I am scared by fake friends more than by snakes.

[Tabby Mac]

Love the subject here Ashwin! Very creative too! Well done!
Tabby

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you so much for your review Tabby. I am delighted

[Tabby Mac]

Always a pleasure!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I like this. I used to tell folks at one of my old workplaces, (Around here you can tell your friends by the ones that stab you in the front!) (smiling) I've always found it sad that people who lack the intestinal fortitude to confront another's actions personally seem to have no problem taking their issue elsewhere. Safe to say that I meet my issues head on and have never had a problem directing them at the source. It's sort of an issue of honor with me. Thus, I was always the last to hear any gossip or rumor and never one to repeat it. I enjoyed the read.

[Ashwin Shanker]

I wish everyone would work the way you do. This weapon is a dreaded one.

[Jiya]

Very meaningful. It spurs many emotions

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you for the review Jiya

[Suchita]

pen is mightier than the sword but the mind here with its baggage is mightiest here in a negative, different sense.

In the end hv u tried to ascribe the reason for such? Explain the lines-If only we had eyes behind, to spot the cut that bleeds within-here its the backstabber that bleeds within or the victim of the attack?

Like the way it has been expressed, very good, also explain the beauty of the term baggage here-how well used. It would certainly enlighten me a lot to understand this beautiful poem, which seems to imply some psycho tendencies of those with emotional baggage, am I right? Pls enlighten me abt why emotional baggage is so harmful?

[Ashwin Shanker]

I meant the victim will have the cut... since it is emotional... it cannot be seen with the naked eye

[Suchita]

good to know, very nice poem

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what i see...those who have lots of baggage tend to blame others...and get revenge on them rather than the perpetrator of the pain...
and once a friend betrays...we can never trust them again...
j.

[Ashwin Shanker]

So true is this point that you shared... It is a weapon that every human dreads but still everyone carries it

[Ana B.]

ah this hits home too closely. Intense and unfortunately true, and more often than anyone would wish. I like the intent behind this one.

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you for the review Ana