Cost of a line of poetry

Cost of a line of poetry

A Poem by Ashwin Shanker
"

What does it take to write a line of poetry?

"

As the pen hangs delicately

Over the paper sheet

Paused, like the wheels of

An aeroplane set to land

 

I question, cross-check and

Verify my thoughts

As if a crash is imminent

If something goes out of hand

 

I wish we realise and recognise

Writing as a set of complex calculations

It is words and not numbers

That is added, subtracted, divided

Else the reader is misguided

 

Thus, each word eventually penned

Is weighed a tonne for its worth, my friend

There is no use of obscenity, rhetoric

Or anything tough to comprehend

 

 

Such confines, our art is often subjected to

In the end, it’s consumed by a chosen few

But why clutch the reins of my mind so tight

I wonder why I so easily give up without a fight

 

Thus before you all, it is this oath that I take

That I shall sacrifice nothing for the art that I make

 

Let my writing be of my own voice

Un-modulated, unrestricted or repressed

Expressed from its deepest core

Unwilling to bend to any critics’ sharpened sword

 

A voice, louder than a lion’s roar

I shall prove once and for all

That the pen is indeed mightier than the sword

© 2017 Ashwin Shanker


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I liked this poem, particularly the imagery of the aeroplane landing upon the page, so loaded with thoughts, that the pilot (author) under gravity is sometimes forced to guesstimate the impact and might leave a mark upon the runway, which might as well be, for all intensive purposes simply strokes upon the piles of other rough landing skid marks. (Entering a library and just looking at a single shelf to me is a great ego leveler!)

This poem says exactly what it does, speaking with a true and determined voice about the psychological approach to the process of writing. In that alone it has great value.
As a writer, I can relate to it.

My only criticism would be that possibly the division of a few concepts which currently comprise one line might add to the dramatic timing of a piece so full of vigour that if separated into a greater number of shorter lines, which would allow, during the transition in that millisecond of human eye reset time where a concept is absorbed and the next is set up below it for immediate consumption in an=, 'rapid fire' manner, thus enhancing the poignant impact of each individual line. I believe that this piece would really lend itself well to a faster pacing of that type.

As with all constructive criticism, it is important not to try to sell your idea too strenuously, (as I inadvertently, have just done!)

Highly personally interesting to me, was that this poem highlights both the contemporary dilemma and the incredibly amazing, new opportunity bestowing abilities that poets and writers have been equipped with, in our contemporary historical period, by the introduction of, effectively, instantaneously ready access to a digital printing press which auto-publishes to a potential global audience, thus equipping any author's output with an even greater status than even they might traditionally have felt could have been given them by an actual, physical, paper-bound volume, established publishing house-issued version of their work, because it has virtually a universal accessibility to the entire global population, (those who can afford bandwidth, and aren't currently running for their lives, that is).

This, I saw expressed in your stanza,

'Thus before you all, it is this oath that I take

That I shall sacrifice nothing for the art that I make



Let my writing be of my own voice

Un-modulated, unrestricted or repressed

Expressed from its deepest core

Unwilling to bend to any critics’ sharpened sword.'

That's it there, exactly. The chant of the freedom to refuse any interested party a say. A total freedom of self expression and complete editorial control opposing any muting of that expression. It's honesty to one's self which makes or breaks an artist. We've honestly gone forward.

The requirements for publication in other web poetry sites, with or without attached print editions, or the submission guidelines for most substantively paying poetry contests, often state that 'any work of previously self-published poetry online is declined a valid entry status', and you'll find your works also often disqualified from inclusion for consideration because they just don't want to encourage a new way, threatening to the old modal form and endorse a revolutionary, completely free artistic expression publication modality, because its very presence powerfully endorses it own absolute state of accessibility, and this illustrates that it easily supercedes that which was, previously, traditionally for centuries, the mainstay of the status quo.

This poem for me expressed and evoked these sentiments perfectly, and valiantly.

Thank you for the opportunity to review it and to follow this train of thought to a crystallisation of an idea which previously may not have been by me realised.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

I don't think anyone else would have written such an exhaustive review... Thank you very much for sh.. read more
Brett Hernan

7 Years Ago

Many thanks Ashwin.
I am glad you found it helpful. I admire your passion.
I am priv.. read more
Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Wish we all had six arms and three heads... I would give an arm and a leg for that :P



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Wow, this poem has an amazing flow! The words are just dancing around, so smooth. Great job :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the wonderful review Gulia
Giulia King

7 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
Oh yes, love this...the pen is indeed a mighty weapon at our disposal :) It seems nothing, however, is left without some kind of rule, it's important to let the voice be organic in poetry, you are right, wonderful piece :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the wonderful review Poppy
Ruth

7 Years Ago

My pleasure :)
Well said Ashan... You have justified the expressions of the writer. Often people think it's easy to write, however it's the writer who knows that not at all times writing comes easy. But when we complete our writing we the writer's always prove that indeed the pen is mightier than the sword!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Glad that you loved the poem Anjali
Very beautifully worded. Good diction structure and flow. Lovely read.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much. Glad that you loved the poem
Ashan,
Well said, sir. There is an obligation to the art and proven poets of the past to adhere to the rules of our verbal creations. We are accountable in our noble quest to transform words into spiritual and emotional journey's for our readers.
Your poem covers all this and then some. To write a poem of worth is not mere doodling or daydreaming. But when the job is done and justly praised then the satisfaction out weighs the effort.
Thank you for your thought provoking work.
Richie b.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Yes, you have captured the theme of the poem really well... I am happy that my poem has invoked the .. read more
i like that...calculations of words...not numbers...we are engineers of lines of words of stanzas...

and the only tool we need...a pen.

j.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Great thoughts Jacob sir, Thanks for the review
"All I need is a sheet of paper and something to write with, and then I can turn the world upside down." -Friedrich Nietzsche
You have certainly lived up to this quote with a good solid composition on the subject. Well done …


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much Phill.

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Ashwin Shanker
Ashwin Shanker

Calicut, Kerala, India



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I am 25 years old, copywriter working at Mullen Lowe Lintas Group, Mumbai. I love writing and have been doing the same since six-years-old. I am a huge fan of communities of writers who support eac.. more..

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