Waiting for you

Waiting for you

A Poem by Ashwin Shanker
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My first poem on love.

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Wishing I could get a glimpse of you.

I long for nothing more the whole day

than to see a smile on your face for something I say.

I don’t ask for too long, a few hundred hours would do.

 


Hoping I could hold your hand.

Take you around the park, around the flowers;

you would rest your head on my shoulders.

Violins would hum soulful tunes in this blessed land.


 

I long for that day when I could call you mine.

Our families united, our bodies united, our fates blessed,

you would look the prettiest bride, like a goddess you’d be dressed.

I don’t want to ask for much of your time; a lifetime would do just fine.

© 2016 Ashwin Shanker


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Ashan,
Well written words expressing a young man longing for the attentions of a young lady. It is hard to find originality on this subject but I enjoyed your creativity. Your expressions showed the depth of the young man's desires.
Richie b.


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much Richie



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I love how this poem can connect to mostly everyone because when you meet the person your meant to be with you want to spent your life with them.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the review Davy.
love the "hundred hours" and the "lifetime" parts especially...

i like to see other males show a sensitive side---we often put up walls for show...and it keeps us from many relationships that could be so good.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

In my experience, I feel there has to be walls erected at the right time, and sensitive side shown a.. read more
A heart undressed, beautifully expressed!
I'm reminded of my heart waiting, and my minds impatience!
Makes the reward of true love all the better!
I hope perfect love makes haste for you!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tabby Mac

7 Years Ago

This is true!
Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Its fancy how love brews ;)
Tabby Mac

7 Years Ago

I admire you! ;)
This is so sweet...
with such a longing....
aww... I wish this to come true for you one day...
Human has only one heart and that one thing belongs to only one soul... When you find it, it becomes your soulmate.......
Soulmates, even after departure, are together... forever...
this is the miracle of love...
patience is all that Matters....
wonderful poem sir...
thanks for sharing...!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the review Anindita.
Actually, I was inspired from an Urdu song, later shown i.. read more
Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

Haha... well, okay... that's good..
and okay, I won't call..
Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Ha
haha... call call... Its okay... Whatever is cool for you .. :)

https://www.. read more

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Added on November 24, 2016
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Tags: love, poetry, fiction, romance, Life

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Ashwin Shanker
Ashwin Shanker

Calicut, Kerala, India



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I am 25 years old, copywriter working at Mullen Lowe Lintas Group, Mumbai. I love writing and have been doing the same since six-years-old. I am a huge fan of communities of writers who support eac.. more..

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