Ashan,
Well written words expressing a young man longing for the attentions of a young lady. It is hard to find originality on this subject but I enjoyed your creativity. Your expressions showed the depth of the young man's desires.
Richie b.
I don't have anyone to show this to :) ... This piece is not writing for any person in particular. :.. read moreI don't have anyone to show this to :) ... This piece is not writing for any person in particular. :)
It's very nicely written. I can feel that the emotions are so real..it feels like you are speaking from your heart. I have liked your powerful writing before. This is the first time I am seeing your writing so simple....its beautiful. Well done!!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you very much Surabhi, for the lovely review. I keep my writing simple as much as I can.
It's very nicely written. I can feel that the emotions are so real..it feels like you are speaking from your heart. I have liked your powerful writing before. This is the first time I am seeing your writing so simple....its beautiful. Well done!!
This poem is so sweet and lovely!
"I don’t want to ask for much of your time; a lifetime would do just fine." So cute! I love reading poems like these
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7 Years Ago
Thank you for the lovely Review Gulia :)
I love writing poems like these too, especially if .. read moreThank you for the lovely Review Gulia :)
I love writing poems like these too, especially if beautiful women like you are reading and complementing it ;)
This is a beautiful poem, how we all long to find the special one to spend the rest of our lives with. Taking you round the park, walking around the flowers - the usage of words are so well constructed and paint such a loving picture.
This is verse at its most best, when you don't have to think about its meaning - it's already perfectly there and such a joy to read. Gave me goosebumps reading this, realising how lucky I am to have found the love of my life.
Thank you Ashan, this really was a pleasure to read.
Mark.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
This review brought a smile to my face. So happy to know that a few words that I string together evo.. read moreThis review brought a smile to my face. So happy to know that a few words that I string together evokes deep emotions to other readers around the globe. You may read this one out to your love, and perhaps bring a smile to her face as well. :) ...
Let our poetry spread happiness, spread love... What say?
7 Years Ago
Might well pick a few choice words and surprise her.
Thanks Ashan for this wonderful .. read moreMight well pick a few choice words and surprise her.
Hope and wishes. Sometime this is all we have.
"I long for that day when I could call you mine.
Our families united, our bodies united, our fates blessed,"
I liked the want and the need in the words. Thank you Ashan for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
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