Waiting for you

Waiting for you

A Poem by Ashwin Shanker
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My first poem on love.

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Wishing I could get a glimpse of you.

I long for nothing more the whole day

than to see a smile on your face for something I say.

I don’t ask for too long, a few hundred hours would do.

 


Hoping I could hold your hand.

Take you around the park, around the flowers;

you would rest your head on my shoulders.

Violins would hum soulful tunes in this blessed land.


 

I long for that day when I could call you mine.

Our families united, our bodies united, our fates blessed,

you would look the prettiest bride, like a goddess you’d be dressed.

I don’t want to ask for much of your time; a lifetime would do just fine.

© 2016 Ashwin Shanker


Author's Note

Ashwin Shanker
Now I am 'Waiting for you' to ...

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Ashan,
Well written words expressing a young man longing for the attentions of a young lady. It is hard to find originality on this subject but I enjoyed your creativity. Your expressions showed the depth of the young man's desires.
Richie b.


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much Richie



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Ohhhhhh!
I am in Love with this Piece Ashwin!

A Lovely read!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pragati Chaudhary

7 Years Ago

Because I read that again!
Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

And you thought that it deserves a second review. great
Pragati Chaudhary

7 Years Ago

Yup!

More the better!
O..MY..GOD.....awesome,outstanding,mind blowing........creation..
Thank you so much for sharing this amazing piece..

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you Anshuman
Love is for the deserved and broken ones can soak all the love thats been given to them!

Lovely it is
Some emotions invoked!

Thankyou for this piece!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you Pragati :)
Wow. I can completely relate to this poem. I loved each and every line of this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you Najam
This is very beautiful. I would love to read more poems with emotions described as well as you did!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Hehe.... Please do read my other work, I have explored several emotions and thoughts in them. Share .. read more
wow
super-duper like it,
words weaven in a sequence of emotions.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the review Apoorva
Ashan,
Well written words expressing a young man longing for the attentions of a young lady. It is hard to find originality on this subject but I enjoyed your creativity. Your expressions showed the depth of the young man's desires.
Richie b.


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much Richie
The poem was sweet but nothing tops that ending. Not much, just a lifetime! Clever words right there. Great work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you Amber lily, for the review :)
Thank you Ashan Shanker for sharing your first work on love. It was such a simplified expression on love and the last line was a topping on writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the review Anjali :)
A lifetime would do just fine..A great line. Nice work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashwin Shanker

7 Years Ago

Thanks Neal

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Added on November 24, 2016
Last Updated on November 24, 2016
Tags: love, poetry, fiction, romance, Life

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Ashwin Shanker
Ashwin Shanker

Calicut, Kerala, India



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I am 25 years old, copywriter working at Mullen Lowe Lintas Group, Mumbai. I love writing and have been doing the same since six-years-old. I am a huge fan of communities of writers who support eac.. more..

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