Stalker Diaries

A stalker's life can be poetic sometimes

I would see her every day.
From my balcony, it was a splendid view to hers.
She would be reading, sleeping and sometimes dancing to a tune.
I would see her play her life every day from Jan to June.

One day she waved at me,
like a lightning shot up my arms, I waved back.
She smiled and then pointed downstairs.

“You want me to come downstairs?” I replied in sign language.

Smart girl she is, she understood and nodded. She disappeared to her room.

I wore my best black shirt and Levi’s jeans.
I should be the prettiest first date she has ever seen.

I came down my flat and saw a small group of dudes waiting for me.
I saw the girl at their side waiting for me.

They gave me two black eyes and a twisted arm.
I promised them I would be of no more harm.

From that day onward, I made my mind fit.
I would turn around my chair, away from the balcony, and only then would I sit. 

Author's Note

P.S. Though it is written in first person. I am not that stalker :P hehe.
This was a humorous piece that I once wrote while high.
I thought of mixing the lives of a poet and a stalker.
A light read. Have fun. And please comment :P

Reviews

[Max Meunier]

i enjoyed the humorous twist on a somewhat dark subject matter. i like how you structured the sort of semi-conversational tone by interspersing it with the would-be poetic inclinations of the "stalker's" perspective. a sort of fun and lighthearted look at what appears to be somewhat of a "stalking" happenstance.

[Schatzi]

Hello Ashwin Shanker,

Haha, the title alone gives this piece a creepy overtone but I really enjoyed the twist ending. The tagline was very appropriate too. I found the poem, as you described, a light read, yet interesting. If I had one issue, it has nothing to do with the poem, title or your writing style or even the subject matter, but it's with your classification--haha. You have it listed as a story but isn't it more a poem? Or is it, as the tagline says, a poetic story? All kidding aside, it was an interesting perspective and I like the ending.

Thank you for sharing!

Kind regards,

Schatzi

[Ashwin Shanker]

Hey Schatzi,

Yes, this write-up is a mix of poetry and short fiction. Well, I would like to mix the two. In future, perhaps that would be my style when I write a book or something. You are the only one who have highlighted this fact I guess. Great observation. It took me 10 minutes to decide whether to categorise this as a poem or a story because it is both.

[Schatzi]

It is as much a poem as it is a story. Not only do I think you have created a new category but I think you've found your unique voice. It will be interesting to see if you are able to turn this storytelling style into book format.

[Ashwin Shanker]

Hope I do Schatzi,
I am working on it. Stay tuned for more

[Daniel-Andre]

Yeah, I found this piece to my liking.

So here`s my thoughts. Indeed, there was a light tone to this text. I felt it especially from the rhyme-play you`ve added to it. In addition, the paragraphs are nice and I couldn`t find any grammatical errors either. I liked the ending too. Very nice.

As a final conclusion, I liked this creation of yours. Very good, man. Continue the good work!

[Ashwin Shanker]

Daniel Andre! My good friend! Thank you once more.
You have no clue I heaved a sigh of relief when you said that this one is error free :)
Thank you so much for your never-ending support and that occasional whip too :P

[Daniel-Andre]

Glad you find my feedbacks helpful, man. I`m glad I can be of service, please. Continue to write, never stop!

[Akshita]

It is so funny! I fell so sorry for the stalker,for his black eyes and twisted arm, but I think that every delicate girl ought to have some tough friends! : )

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you Akshita, YES. That message was intended. Women should never hesitate to get the help from their male friends in such cases. From a moral angle, I would insist women to never be scared of Stalkers. That is my main point.

[Mifa]

I like this. A great read Ashwin, funny too. Keep writing.

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thanks Mifa!! :D

[Sami Khalil]

It is indeed a light read and with some wittiness to it. So good you are bringing the plight of the stalkers' victims to light. Excellent...

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you very much Sami.
Would really love it if I could have your review for my previous works as well.

[Sami Khalil]

I believe in reciprocation. You are welcome...:)....................

[Ashwin Shanker]

Reciprocation will happen for sure :D ... haha...

[Sami Khalil]

:)))))))).......