Her Red Tears

 

She cries sadly

For this night

Gravity

Pulls them down

 

Teardrops

Hit the ground

Make a splash

Circle ‘round

 

Form a moon

Ring a bell

Raining stars

Taste that smell

 

Red tears

By the door

On the wall

Body hits the floor

 

One last noise

To pierce the night

Screams of pain

For their love

 

She kneels

He smiles

She cries

He dies

 

Men’s

Suit

Women’s

Dress

 

Casket closed

Going down

For one more tear

Into the ground

Reviews

[EVERYTHINGyoucantelltoS..]

Gravity
Pulls them down

i like that general train of thought....i think the last three stanzas need to catch up with the others language wise, though...they seem somewhat dulled compared to the others...comparatively...and the last stanza didnt really close it for me...probably because it mainly went above my head for the most part...liked the majority of thoughts, though...

[Wildecat]

A splenid write, a pleasure to read your poetry.

[Xxxletthepainmeltawayxx..]

WOW! this is truely amazing...and so relatable...

[[[where is the whisperi..]

awesome shane! i like the shortness of the lines lol

and the short yet meaningful imagery

also, who dies?

its interesting you thought of this listening to that song lol