Spend a Day

had a dream, it was awesome, inspired this poem, its choppy, but i like it :p for:Kayla (duh)

Spend a Day

I want to buy you a ranch, Fill it up with horses,

Watch you as you ride the courses, then roll around with you in the hay.

I want to wake you up in Paris, and eat lunch in L.A.,

Take a moonlit walk a Cambodian bay,

Or maybe we could fly to Rio, dance on de cinco!

Or travel to Spain Olay!

As long as I’m with you, there is not issue,

As long as we spend a day.

We could climb the great wall,

Go relax in Nepal,

If you can recall, I’m in for the long haul,

So let’s just spend a day.

I won’t go without you,

Cause when I’m not with you,

Baby it’s just not the same,

I don’t care what we do, as long as we spend a day

Author's Note

its very choppy i know, but i wanted to get this idea down, maybe i will re-vise it later, but i didnt want to loose it from my mind lol. i know its cheesey, but if you have read any of my stuff you already knew it was gonna be. im still trying to get into the groove of writing, but its tough, but everytime i see her face,or hear her voice i get every ounce of inspiration back :)

Reviews

[J. R.]

That is so nice. Any of these would make a wonderful day out.

[tynamite]

Stunning.

[Coyote Poetry]

Not a choppy poem. Just a powerful poem of love. When we love someone. We want to give them the world. I like the description and the positive feel of this beautiful poem. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Calypso]

Nice dream

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

It blends the reader so mush that it is hard to understand with just one read throug, so I say to all, read and read again, a truly great piece.

[Katie]

yea, this is definitely a rather choppy one, I was struggling to try and find some flow to it. Being said, I don't think it would take much tweaking to make it flow, so if you do choose to revisit it I think you could certainly make it a lot better.

It's a cute poem, and a cute concept. This girl is obviously very special to you.

[melissa]

Awww this poem is a great poem her parents should let yall be together not judge you for you are they should be happy for her and you it sausage in the bible shall not judge and that is what her parents are doing and that is wrong

[Marie Harrison]

Very creative
Lots of dynamic
Ways to fill a day
Cute!