Let's Talk

for Kayla

Let’s Talk

Your Name causes sweet emotions, no not pain.

Your laugh, causes memories, I know that you where thinking the same.

Your Voice, takes away the tears, and gives me the strength to say…

I am proud,

But as bad as I want you back, as bad as I want to kiss you right now.

Let’s just talk about everything.

About your day,

About all the things piled on your tray.

You got your school and your work,

Your family and car,

Drama from your friends,

How you want to make amends.

Let’s just talk.

Let’s go, sit in a park, and let it all out.

Girl you can cry, you can be pissed and pout!

Call me up at night, I’m free anytime.

Let’s talk till you sleep, my snoring follows right behind.

You always say you know you can talk to me,

So let’s talk.

I want to talk about you, talk about me,

How you think I’m so damn weird, but it’s so funny.

If I can’t be your boy, can I be the man,

The guy you go to when you just can’t stand!

All of the bullshit, all of the hell.

Tell me all the things you think you can’t tell.

If you can’t call, why don’t you text?

You act like contact with me is something you vex.

But every time you talk to me,

You laugh, you smile, you cry, and you fall asleep, peacefully, everynight!

So let’s talk! Let me be there for you,

I don’t ever want to stop, hearing from you.

Let’s just talk about everything.

About your day,

About all the things piled on your tray.

You got your school and your work,

Your family and car,

Drama from your friends,

How you want to make amends.

Let’s just talk.

Let’s go, sit in a park, and let it all out.

Girl you can cry, you can be pissed and pout!

Call me up at night, I’m free anytime.

Let’s talk till you sleep, my snoring follows right behind.

You always say you know you can talk to me,

So let’s talk.

Author's Note

i want her to know that, even if we are not together, i still want to be with her, even if it is just as a friend. cuz i dont love her because she loves me back, i love her because i love her. and if she just honestly doenst want a boy friend right now, i understand. but lets just talk. cuz we are happy when we talk to eachother, every time. give it a shot, you wont be let down

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a great poem letting that person know that you are there for them and it doesn't matter that life isn't peffect "she" isn't perfect you still care deeply enough to be there when she needs you the most. Instead of being angry over the split you are being comforting and accepting. Trying to understand what it is she needs at that moment. Great write.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nothing better then a long walk and good conversation. We need to know laughter and joy in a life. I like how you told the desire of the poem. Needing time together to find peace and happiness. I like the repetition. Made the poem have balance and strength. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[KAREN]

Great poem, and even if you're not together being friends might be best, and who knows oneday again it may be more.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was so beautiful, I hope Kayla listens and talks to you!

[Arianna]

true love is putting aside your feelings to do what makes them happy, because if you really love them. then their feelings matter more than your own. you prove with this that you truly love her. and even if she doesn't want to be more than friends you'll be there trough thick and thin. honestly this poem is breathtaking. it has so much love in it and its beautiful. at this point all you can do is be there for her. even if it isn't ideal. and you already know that so i don't know why I'm saying it. beautiful poem.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A great message to the ones we hold dear and the ones we hold near, a classically cycled piece that speaks to the optimist in us all, well done

[temoralez]

Thoughts:
I liked this piece. I also like how you started and ended the poem using a similar phrase. "Let me be there for you, I don’t ever want to stop, hearing from you." This line stood out the most to me; it reminded me of myself. Being in love...is a blessing (if I may say), but being friends with someone you love is difficult. However, if you truly love someone you'll give them their space even if you have to let them go (but I'm not saying you should let her go). You never know when the right one will come along and I believe you have. You're lucky to have her and she's lucky to have you.

Constructive Criticism:
None. I felt it didn't need any critics.

[Tasha]

This is amazing Shane!!!
It was wonderful
And wonderfully expressed,
I loved it.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[melissa]

Your poem is so amazing thank you shane for sharing keep up the great work

[Katie]

Grammar, grammar. It may be a poem, but it still needs it. You should read over this and edit that.

Certain parts flow incredibly well, but you have a few lines that just don't fit and break the flow making it hard to really get into the poem.

Your message is clear and obvious, and really quite sweet, you portray your emotions very well. I hope things all work out for you two