Green Eye's

Green Eye’s

Your thin hand held in mine.

I would hold you all time,

Your soft skin, pale as snow.

All of my feelings you know,

I just want to see, you and me.

And look into those eyes, brilliant green.

They’re the color of, fresh viridity.

 

There are things I need to say to you, words that my mind seems to vex,

Looking down an unknown road, the kind of fear you can’t confess.

That you scare me to death,

And you take away my lifeless breath.

That so easily you could crush me to the ground till there’s nothing left.

For a while there is not reply, not a word and I must dry my eyes.

And the words you say, take away all of my worry and all of my strife,

 “I would do anything to never lose you in my life”

I’d been laying on clichés,

Thinking who could ever really love me.

And now I’m ready to wait,

For when we can share our love and it is no longer in debate.

 

Don’t look too far,

I know at times I can seem so bizarre,

I hope that doesn’t make you hesitate,

And think of me as second rate because here,

All of my words I will translate.

And put under your pillow as we are laying there.

I find I am lucky, to love one who loves me,

I find I am so happy, to trust someone, who trusts me.

Reviews

[Nova]

This is really sweet. Wonderful words. Thank you for sharing.

[melissa]

This is an amazing poem she is really pretty i wish you the best keep the poems and stories coming I am happy for your poems are great I love reading them

[KAREN]

Nice!! Great flow, and say you have it bad!!

[SamBug]

I believe I really liked this one! :)

[Ryan]

It's comforting to know that a love like this exists in the world. Excellent poem.

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[Sukriti Suki]

I liked the last 2 lines a lot...it is wonderful to love someone who loves you. nice one.

[Jake Donald Stephens]

This is a great poem, full of honest emotions. The only line I would take out is:
"They're the color of fresh veridity"
Sorry bro, it just sounds a little high school.
But otherwise the poem is brilliant, heartfelt and with good rhymes, and no spelling errors (I read it twice to make sure, lol)
I'm really wishing you and her the best, I couldn't be happier for you!

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[Vanessa Rico]

This poem is utter sweetness and captures your love for your girl! Well done!
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[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Very lovely and heartwarming piece.

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"That so easily you could crush me to the ground till there’s nothing left.
For a while there is not reply, not a word and I must dry my eyes.
And the words you say, take away all of my worry and all of my strife,
“I would do anything to never lose you in my life” "

This stanza was gorgeous! I could really relate to it. I loved this poem. Keep writing! (: