Falling

I do not know,

What words I can say

To describe why

I feel this way.

A bite on the finger,

A kiss on your cheek,

Your skin turns from soft white,

To red as a beet.

Resting my head on your soft, fair hair,

And thinking of things,

I became completely aware.

That I am falling my dear.

And I say to myself,

I will always want to be right here.

Falling without fear.

My arms wrapped around your waist.

The feel of the air, the scents and the tastes.

Are forever imbedded into my memory,

I hope this is not fake,

I want this to be real, a dream won’t do.

If it is a dream, I wish to never awake.

And if I am to awake, I hope it is beside, you.

Reviews

[melissa]

I can relate to this so much because it is the way about my husband thanks for sharing

[iamkim]

when you mix up true emotions with your writings, it's going to be a bomb! i love the way how you did it to this one :)

[*[[ Cadence ]]*]

a very sincere and beautiful poem (:

[Shiningwolf]

I like how you express your feelings...Everyone needs someone in this life. Unfortunally when you never find anyone you tend to feel alone. Love is a special feeling no matter what anyone says. Never stop. If you really like this girl just tell her how you truly feel about her. In fact I would show her this poem! It was an excellent write!

[Coyote Poetry]

If I could go back in time. I wouldn't change the people. I would be kinder and enjoy every second with the sweet woman who shared a part of life. Life is hard enough. When something good comes your direction. Hold on and hope the time will last forever if it is good. A very strong poem. Fear is a two-sided blade. Fear can stop us from missing a special time in a life. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

Love comes in many forms. Fast and fiery or slow and seductive. Let things happen and don't try to push it along; that never works. Enjoy the moments without thinking what is next. This is a beautiful poem that shows your feelings clearly.

[Jake Donald Stephens]

I actually think this is a thoughtful and well constructed poem, and I hope she does like it. My fatherly advice, though, would be to just tell and/or show her how you feel in person, some time when the moment feels just right. You'll know when it comes! But that's just my take on it.
I sure as hell wish you the best in everything bro, and I hope you and your girl end up as happy together as Cliff and Liz (ha ha)!

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