Goodbye is not always bad, (It’s the Loneliness that makes it Seem that Way)

sometimes it just needs to be said

Goodbye is not always bad, (It’s the Loneliness that makes it Seem that Way)

The gleaming shine of my Cell phone screen wakes me up from a soft dream of love,

With depressing texts, reminded me of the past you cannot let go of.

What would be so different this time as it was before?

Think of the past that I abhor.

Shattering my veins, with dark blue blood, pumping from frustration like it did before!

I’m sorry girl but I do not love you like I did, anymore.

And I know that it is sad, but goodbye is not always bad,

I know one day soon you will be glad.

We will always know of the times we had,

But for now it’s goodbye, and for a while it will feel so sad.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Rhine Wolf]

the title is what grabbed me! beautiful and to the point!

[J. R.]

Breaking up is a hard thing to do, but if it doesn't work out then there's nothing else to do.

[Jake Donald Stephens]

How true that is. Goodbye is definitely not always bad.
Sometimes it would have been better to never say hello in the first place.
But it looks like you've found a good one now.
(And hot damn, she's cute!!!!)

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[Omar Fendri]

the 5th line is utterly breathtaking... the description really amazed me. Great and heartwarming poem... nice choice of words.
i like it

[Star Wolf]

You're right, good-byes aren't aways bad but they sure can hurt for a while. Once the pain has faded then the good can shine through. Sometimes relationships just need to end, they're run their course. I think you did an awesome job on this. I read it several times just because I DO like it!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

As for me, I really do love it!
Good title also.. but it is bad sometimes I think.. but this is your poem so it is not bad - love it.

Chloe

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breaking up is hard to do...but if its not right..its not right...

[ettorney]

SB, this poem has some strong possibilities. Here are some critiques for you.
The sub title, second part, "(It’s the Loneliness that makes it Seem that Way)" Is not brought out in the poem. Why does the loneliness do that? How?
Change "reminded" to "reminding" to keep the present tense consistent in the first sentence.
What does Shattering my veins mean? how can veins be shattered? A heart maybe. but veins? Find another verb that makes more sense.

The last four lines are not as strong as the first six, either in imagery or flow. Consider rewriting them so they "feel" similar to the beginning of the poem.

Otherwise, nice write.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem with a sad and logical story. When two people reach a point where happiness isn't possible. Ain't easy to escape in a polite way. Time does make all things less painful. I like the ending. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Bubo]

Sometimes letting go is the right thing to do~ as hard as it is...........well written and very apt!