Prologue

the prologue for the book, introduces two important characters

The narrow eyed creator walked down the forest trail, his long layered silver hair was held back in a ponytail,  the wind picked it up slowly and it lifted back flawlessly as he reached the hill top. His yellow eyes grew filled with anger as he looked out to the burnt land filled with yellow bulldozers and landscaping vehicles of other types…

                “I will not let this go unpunished… this forest was the first one I had ever created… you shall pay for your ignorance.”  Said the creator with a deep and coarse voice.

He then raised his left hand into the air and swept it to the right quickly, as he did clouds began to form in the sky and all of the monstrous terra-forming vehicles began to turn to a dissipating dust, the workers who were driving the vehicles screamed in pain and agony as their bodies slowly began to dissipate just as the vehicles did. Blood was soon all that remained as evidence that there was ever life there.

                “From the ashes of that which I destroy…I will create more.” Said the creator as he placed his right hand to the barren earth, he closed his eyes as the ash particles that were once workers and machines destroying the forest began to circle around him. As his fingertips dug into the barren earth the particles submerged into the ground, and soon trees and grass, stones and bushes sprouted up around him. He then stood, and with a smirk on his face he said.

                “I am Zenfone, creator of this reality and this world which resides in it. All knees shall bow, for I am the true lord.” He then quickly turned as he heard footsteps from behind him.

The soft eyed son looked at his father with silver eyes; his hairless head seemed to shine as light through the trees reflected off of his pure body. Although he appeared much older than the creator, he was one of his two direct sons.

                “So… this is what you do with your reality father?”  Asked the son with remorse for those who died. The wind then picked up steadily lifting the creator, Zenfone’s silver hair. 

                “Markos, it is so very good to see you again, my son. How have the Oracles been treating you? ” The creator said with a pleased tone to his voice.

                “father.” Said Markos, “I have not come to fight you. I have come to ask you a favor.” He then sat on a nearby boulder, although he seemed calm and secure on the outside, he was frightened on the inside, Zenfone could see straight through him.

                “Really? You don’t say? And whatever could this favor be? I am a very gracious god.” He said with a smile on his face.

                “You are no god father, just a chosen one who has lost his way….” Said Markos closing his eyes in sadness. “It was decided recently that I would be the one to train the chosen child… the final chosen child, and I have a proposition for you.” Markos then began to grow an adrenaline rush as he asked.

                “I will not teach him his birth element. Instead I will teach him the element that will be absent. In return you do not fight him until he is truly ready.”

                “What would his birth element be might I ask?” asked Zenfone with curiosity in his voice.

                “Zero,” answered Markos quickly.

Zenfone’s eyes grew wide with surprise and happiness; he then stepped over to a tree and placed his left hand upon it, as he did it dissolved. As it’s ashes floated around him he placed his right hand over th ground, and then with a flex of his fingers the dust gathered on the flooring of the forest and formed into a detailed beautiful throne chair, its red cushions seemed fit for a king, and the carvings in the varnished wood showed an epic war between two angels. He then sat in the newly created throne and placed his elbow on his knee and his chin upon his hand and said,

                “Well then, he should surely be a powerful chosen one, especially if he has my blood within him. Let me guess you are not going to reveal to him his elemental power over Zero because you fear he will become like me and his father yes?”

Markos did not answer; instead he knelt down and asked again,

                “I vow to not teach Matthew Strack the power of element Z if you vow to never try to kill him until he is ready to fight you, if I break the rules of this vow then you may immediately destroy him and myself. Will you grant me this, favor?”

Zenfone sat upon his throne for a long period of time, he was thinking, thinking of how this would all play out; but even he could not deny that this was a golden opportunity to weaken his enemy into the same pathetic state the last thousand chosen ones were in.

                “Element Zeros, Element Z, The Ultimate Element, able to create anything, with a simple sacrifice… if there was ever a chosen one that was able to control such an element then I would have a very difficult time going through with my plans. Therefore I shall agree to this, and grant you the ultimate favor, as long as you never teach him the ultimate element. If you do then death will come on swift wings for you and your final savior. Leave now before I have time to change my mind.”  Said Zenfone standing from his throne.

As he stood Markos rose from his kneel, he then turned and said,

                “You understand that this chosen one is different. Not like the others. You will die by his hand.” As he did, his entire body began to wiggle and shake out of existence in this realm; he had teleported away, vanished into thin air. Zenfone then stood staring at the empty space were Markos once stood.

                “Then my son… let my awakening begin, I have been hiding in this self created reality far too long.” He then smiled and just as Markos did, he vanished out of reality.

Author's Note

from the original almost all of the names have been changed as well as the rules for element Z i feel this gives the story more ground and realism to a fascinating brain child lol! tell me what you all think pleees!

Reviews

[Michael Davis]

Hummm, it's a little confusing but, I have a whole bunch going on around me right now. I'll have to look at it again.

[SamBug]

Sounds like a good start to a book here

[Emunah June.]

Oooooooh I like it :DD

[Jake Donald Stephens]

I can see it's starting off at a different place than the last version. At least the prologue anyway. I know finding the right beginning can be difficult sometimes. I've re written the first chapter of one of my books WAY too many times to count.
But as far as comparing this prologue to the other one, I think this one seems to serve more purpose to the story as a whole. Although there are good points to both versions. The old one, I thought, started off more stylishly (sorry)!
Any way you begin it, this is a great book.

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[Dakota]

I can't place my finger on it but there's something missing from the imagery, maybe just weave in a few more minor details to make the pictures absolutely complete. I love a good fantasy piece! Can't wait to read more!

[Senseless whatever]

excellent write. Plenty of detail to give the reader great visuals. Intriguing storyline. Pulls the reader into the world you created. Only one line confused me, probably more of a typo. "Markos then began to grow an adrenaline rush as he asked."

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting beginning. I like the story line. I look forward to see where you are taking the story. A strong beginning. Thank you.
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