Secrets

Secrets 

What is viewed is not seen.

What is said is not heard.

What is felt is not remembered.

It is all hidden,hidden behind the wall.

She smiles in her pain.

Laughs even in agony.

But she cries,she always cries,

and always dies,when hiding behind the wall.

Oh, the safety of the wall.

You may give, but will not be accepted.

You may ask, but will not be given.

You may bond, but you will live alone.

You may enter, but not with heart in tow.

You may leave, but take nothing with you.

She is the broken little doll,who lives

                      behind the wall.

Woe,to the broken little doll.

Author's Note

a poem for my best friend ever, i feel she is hiding allot of feelings from the world for fear of being hurt.

Reviews

[Angelauthor1204]

nicely done.

[Senseless whatever]

Very good write. trying to relate to another's feelings good job here overall. really good flow and feelings of concern and worry come through strongly.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

from pain a lot of us build walls to keep what little we have for ourselves~always afraid the world is filled with dragons and not a knight among them~ your poem is constructed in a truly effective way in that each line feels like a gentle attempt to ease the bricks out of her wall~ to offer her light within~ beautiful~

[Ashley]

wow thats moslty all i can say once you read it you cant say much cuz it take the words right out of you great job xox ashley sarah

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

fear can control us if we allow it and kill us Fear can make us sick and fear welcomes the Devil in, fear can be the Enemy Our Enemy Can be also ourselves if we don't heal and our heart and spirit is corrupt from our pain and some times have lota Negtivity in our home many Fight with their minds cause of the pain thats scared them and causes confusion and what comes outta our mouths is from our heart the world teaches us that fear is how it should be and that's a Huge crock a lie we are ment to over come it cause we are not a weak spirit we are strong and things in our lives makes us stronger Took me my Whole life to over come some things that hurt me but i wish i know what i know now then . she must over come it i understand how she feels i used to be there but i don't allow it to happen any more. 2Timothy 1:7 7.For God hath not given usthe Spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind. fear isn't from God thats the devil and the Messed up things in the world that pushes it upon us fear used to control my life but we have to heal also and not every one Judges i also had to find myself again be compfortable in my own skin now what others say doesn't fase me as much i will keep her in my prayers and we also some times let our past paralyze us and i been trying to over come that it's hard but i don't give up the Devil wants us to be sad and fail and God wants us to to be happy and successful in life to not fail in things and over come them.
Hope this helps Many Blessings God bless my Friend Have a amazing night

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we build walls to protect ourselves but actually while keeping others out, we keep ourselves locked in..I really enjoyed this

[Marie Harrison]

Excellent poem. It says so much in a few words. I hope she ventures out and enjoys the world before it's too late. What a good friend you are.

[A-Lovely-Anxiety]

Beautiful write, great format. :D

[Adelia Alighieri]

I love this, it's written straight from the heart.

[KalebG (Cry Faux)]

My friend does this also, she hides her feelings in towards me so i can never see her break, i love the way she stays beatiful and strong, wonderful poem.