A Long Drop And A Sudden Stop

lol cooked dis one up after repo

A Long Drop And A Sudden Stop

 

Watchen your weight,

Wishen you were still twenty eight.

Bitchen bout polotics,

Try’in not to be an alchoholic.

Old grudges,

Past loven.

Sometimes I wonder why it bothers us all.

Payin bills,

Poppin pills,

Sometimes I wonder why we  just don’t get with it!

Cause we all wind up in alittle pine box,

With a kinda long drop,

And a sudden stop!

Author's Note

the grave robber to me is the best character ever in a rock opera, i wish i was him lol, and i wish he would read this lol

Reviews

[Senseless whatever]

Like the flow and message here. Are the typos on purpose? Seems they add to the effect of the piece.

[Nina Kari]

ok wait 1 are u talkin bout repo the genetic opera if so duuuuuuuude love it, if not never mind :p. and 2 this was wonderful, there were spelling errors but no ones perfect so i dont mind. i still got the meaning of the write.

[Liza]

jaw dropping write

[Art Sun]

nice work on this poem...

[heich]

lol..just love this...i have to smile and agree..we'll all go there anyway..lol

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

lol! i love this.

[.]

witty and dry...really liked that way, you used the words to force the reader to use an accent..nice one

[SimplyDisastrous]

I love this. It's kind of funny. Though, it had alot of spelling errors and other stuff, I loved it.

[Ruth]

Well, pretty much summed it up! lol
Cool!
xx

[Franklin...]

Actually, I think you could interpret this in two ways: the "why bother with life, with all its pain and annoyances, when you're going to die anyway" way, and the "why sweat all the problems in life, live it well and enjoy what you can, 'cause who knows when you're gonna die" way.
So enough of that, overall it's a good poem. I like how you wrote it with the accent; gives it a unique character. The last three lines make me see a coffin being dropped into a grave, nice work with that.