Fight Me

Lets Do This!

Fight Me

From across the Lot he glared at my friend,

on a good note i knew this night wouldn't end.

He walks up to her and spins her around,

alcohol on his breath.

I shout,

Waking the misery.

FIGHT ME!

Or leave now.

FIGHT ME!

I wont back down!

FIGHT ME!

For glory!

FIGHT ME!

For honor!

For a piece of my flesh!

STRIKE ME!

To Hurt me!

Lets see if i can bleed!

Back off!

Get away!

TAKE ME!

Lets see!

If your man enough to go toe to toe!

FIGHT ME!

TAKE ME!

Strike me to the cold ground!

or watch me spin you head around!

As i stare at him bleeding on the ground i smile as i feel my eye swelling up from the bruise. I wrap my arm around her and we leave.

Author's Note

a bar fight can be nasty, thank you billy for pissingme off and makein me think of this lol

Reviews

[Nina Kari]

i like it. :D maybe because im just naturally violent but i actually like this peice. no its not the best flow but i dont think it was meant to be a flowy write. it was brutal and yet funny beacause i could actually see this scene. great work here
Strike me to the cold ground!
or watch me spin you head around!


As i stare at him bleeding on the ground i smile as i feel my eye swelling up from the bruise. I wrap my arm around her and we leave.----- dude! loved that part! :D 1000!

[Dupree]

Its okay. Not the greatest. Its a good idea, Im just not seeing alot of good flow, and the format seems off. Its a really good idea though.

[Ladysue]

very vivid indeed. the ending was good. nicely done..

[Ruth]

I like the turn around at the end hon! A clever piece sweety, poignant and expressive with vividness!
xx

[Molafvt]

Ha! This is so real and direct that it brought back many a memory. I also want to thank Billy for inspiring you to write this. it is anger and confrontation at it's best.

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

You can sense the anger. I liked this.

[Jack Inthebox]

Nice asskicking story. Unfortunately I never said anything clever when someone fought me, which had only been a couple of times I'm kind of a pacifist :)

[Marianne]

Oh my ~ some anger so powerfully and poignantly expressed....I was captivated by this scene of confrontation from the start ! You've got talent, Shane !!!

The last 2 lines would read even better if they stayed within your format ~ you don't need an explanation, you want to finish with a BANG....my take, anyway.

[Brittany]

I love the format of this it's great, and you can easily picture the entire thing and sense your anger. Great job (:

[Cristal Bridges]

Angry much? Haha. It's nice to see someone who actually defends a lady's honor. I've never been in a bar fight but I can imagine that it would get your adreniline flowing like this poem does. Well written.