A Hundred Million Suns

a poem about someone who did me very wrong a few years back...

A Hundred Million Suns

I don't know,

What words I could say

to make you think my way....

I walked up to you house in the bitter cold,

just to be the one that those warm arms would hold.

But now I see you found another man to take your breath away!

Well don't worry honey your gonna have it your way!

      Cause like a hundred million suns,

I will come undone,

and as you watch him run,

know.

I'm like a hundred millions suns.

You say it was a mistake,

you plead me to stay,

well sorry honey,its not gonna work like that today!

       Cause like a hundred million suns,

I will come undone,

and as you watch him run,

know.

I'm like a hundred million suns.

Burning like the fire in my eyes,

all I want is to see him die.

Burning like the hatred in my soul,

My broken heart...

you know, the one you stole.

         And like a Hundred million suns,

I will come undone,

and he will run,

and you will be there.

Waiting for... the sun.

Author's Note

you know who u r. hope yalll liked it

Reviews

[lavina k.]

A good one.
greatly expressed your hatred and love for the same person who left you for some one else and then regretting for their mistake but it wont work because you have moved on.
And thats life. Life can't wait for anyone to come or leave. It has to move on.
Thank you!!!!!!!

[TeenRomance2]

Very interesting and well-written. I agree, it could be turned into a really great song!

[Cristal Bridges]

Wow! This could totally be turned into a song! The words you used I must say are epic! It really hurts when someone stomps on your heart like that! What a way to rant. Just a fantastic poem, I loved it!

[Art Sun]

nice...to be hurt like this is a emotional hurt not forgotten so soon...nicely written poem...

[Jack Inthebox]

This is a great hate anthem. It reminded me that I did not publish mine on here yet. so I did, give it a look when you can. http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/MOTHCOTW/584825/

[.]

sounded like a song, powerful and emotional well done

[.SaveSydney!.]

I LOVE THIS ONE. :D
Mostly because I can really relate to it;
And this is just..epic.
Great job!

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

incredible imagery (like usual) i really like this and whoever she is shes incredibly idiotic

[Onyx_Rayne]

Very nicely done. The emotion is strong and I love the image of " A Hundred Million Suns."

I really like the structure and form, it's unique and it works very well.

Fantastic work :)

[Joseph - Michael]

It sure as hell showed a lot of mixed anger and pain... Something can't be neither forgiven nor forgotten... Hope writing it out helped to get things off of your chest?

Other than that, it's all good tho...