Letters of Marque

Capitan flints last voyage in to sunscar island!

Letters of Marque 

his captains coat blew in the wind, his eyes were cold and harsh, not a blink, nor a glance any direction but ahead, he was ready. the wind stung his face as it swept passed him.

"Avast ye! hoist the colors high! we have some Corsair's u'cumin" he shouted to his noble and true crew.

"aye cap'in! ye herd the man! step to it! on the double!" shouted first mate Abel.

in the center of their ship grew a small tree, next to that tree was the main mast, which flew the colors, their flag, the Eternity.

"HOLD!" shouted the captain.

"sir?"asked Abel.

"ready the canons" replied the captain.

"Flint what you got planned for these bilge-sucking codpieces?"

"dead men tale no tales master Abel" replied Captain Flint.

"Aye Sir!" saluted Abel excitedly.

as the enemy ship drew closer, the canons were released , each of the large metal contraptions were Triple barrel beasts of technology, ten on each side, and five in the front and four in the rear.

"Run a shot across the bow!" shouted Flint to his crew as he ran to the wheel of the ship. the shot was a warning to the enemy ship to not declare a battle with the crew of the Eternity. however, their warning was met with return fire, 

"Show no Quarter!!!" shouted Flint in an angry rage. the canons blew with great firepower, and the enemy ship did not have the time to reload before it was completely destroyed.

"captain what is our current heading?" asked Abel.

"Hard alee Master Abel!" commanded Flint with a grin across his face.

"sir? we will be travel'in at a snails pace" Abel replied confused.

"were we are going, the wind will not favor us, we are soon to be at Sunscar island." Announced Flint with his unique and trademark pirate grin across his face.

"sir sunscar island?" asked Abel.

"Aye, i'll be drop'in you and the crew off at port Saymin. then i will be off to sunscar. the military wont have this ship in their grasps Master Abel." explained the captain as he left the deck and retreated down to the captains chambers. it was a large room with polished bamboo flooring, the captains desk was built into the flooring and next to his desk was his blade, the blood red Persian cutlass, the first treasure that Flint had ever found, it never lost its edge, and in the hands of only the most noble captains it would feel weightless, but in the hands of one who was not meant to hold it, it weight as much as a hundred blades. the black onyx handle was smooth and shined like the stars them-self. 

the captain sat at his desk, and picked up the summons from the military in england. the letters of marque, although it seemed like it would be a choice, if he did not reply he and his crew would be ravenously hunted by the armada of the English military. Lord Barkus saw himself as the commander of the new seas. 

ever since the great flood of 2220, the entire continent of the Americas was submerged, and now nearly all of the land mass that once was, is now sea, thus pirate-iring has returned, and in the two-hundred years of it being as it once was the military has also became as corrupt and ill-supervised as it once was.

the military higher ups saw pirates as cheap hands, and some would go for it, others would try to run, but they were eventually gunned down.

Flint looked at the papers, knowing that they signaled the end of his pirate career, but he would not let the military destroy nor take his beloved ship,  the Eternity had a hold on Flint, it was a very powerful ship no doubt, but Flint believed that it was a ship that would link destinies, and sow him into the fabric of history forever.

they soon reached port Saymin, as they did Flint announced his final goodbye to the crew of the eternity, and he was off to Sunscar island, were he would drink his last bottle of rum, and chase it with a bottle of sleeping death, a painless poison which forces you to sleep then it kills you.

he soon reached Sunscar island, were i laid anchor in a well hidden cave, the island was nearly impossible to get to, he figured that anybody who could get to the ship and take her from this cave, would deserve it and all of the treasure aboard, which would only be the blood vein (his sword) and the tree that grew in the center of the ship, though it was only a sapling at the moment, it would one day be large and bear what was called the hybrid fruit of eden, this fruit would give the eater energy and nutrients, and it was said that the flavor was never the same.

above the cave was a hole, it was much like a sky light, he sat at his desk with a bottle of rum in one hand and the vile of sleeping death in the other.

"yo ho ho, and a bottle of rum!" he shouted as he took his last sip of rum, and quickly drained the bottle of poison. 

then, the most feared captain in all twenty seas, died the most peaceful death there was in these times.

                                     the end

Author's Note

im thinking of makeing this a prequil to a book but idk if this is any good.

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Shane,

A most enjoyable write. The dialog between Captain and crew was excellent. I would use normal rules of capitalization, however. Why all the lower case?

A good story, nicely executed. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks!

Best regards,

Rick

[Franklin...]

I don't think there enough pirate books. Make this into one! haha
The dialog had me grinning, it caught the reckless, carefree spirit that I think we all find so appealing about pirates. The premise, being set 200 years in the future, but with technology seeming to have decayed somewhat, is interesting.
Yeah, as I said, I'd like to see a continuation.

[Dakota]

My middle son being all about pirates I read this to him. I think you've got a great beginning here, maybe a little more character description but other then that I see no reason why there shouldn't be more!

[Shay33]

I'd say this is pretty good. :)
The only thing is that there are some grammatical errors, punctuation errors, etc.
But it has a lot of potential to be a great book, and it sounds very authentic and "piratey". :)
Good write.

[RDOriginal]

This is a really great start to a book and fairly unique on here as I've yet to review any other historical piece.

The main strength I see so far are in the dialogue, which manages to be very 'piratey' without overstepping the mark and you also manage to a catch an element of a different time in history. The parts that perhaps need working on (and I'm sure these would come out when you began the process of extending the piece to book sized chanpters) would be in character development and putting more action into the action. I say the latter as what the reader is perhaps looking for in a sea battle is exploding timbers with bodies and sails flying everywhere and what you've given them is, 'it was completely destroyed'.

There's nothing to be discouraged about in this piece, extend it and throw yourself into the action and you'll have a really nice story!

[Ruth]

I have to say hon, you are continuing this in a great way :)
Another chapter that holds a lot more than the last, you are really grabbing the bull by the horns lol
Great chapter love
xx

[Senseless whatever]

Definately has potential. I for one would like to see more.

[Coyote Poetry]

It had possibilities. You put a lot in into one chapter. Add more detail and character description I believe would be a fun story to read. The way the world is going. The story may come true. We all maybe living on floating device to survive.
Coyote

[A. K. MAXIMILIEN]

Great write!! I've got say this really entertaining! I totally encourage to make into a book!! :)

[Blackdragon]

good work.. keep it up.. :)