Aerobiosis

Life

Aerobiosis 

with a breath of air,

a flame will flair.

from the waters womb bare,

we rise.

we walk,

on the earths hard rock.

we dance,

in the air.

naked bodies,

heads of hair.

we fight,

with the deadly might.

we talk,

to unlock.

our origins of flight.

we write...

because we want to create.

Author's Note

idk if it is any good what do yall think?

Reviews

[Albatross]

There's always some strange, fulfilling, liberating satisfaction that comes when one creates something new. Although perhaps not one of your best works, I still enjoyed this:)

[KatiePie]

Its passionate, but it's missing a bit of flair, still an amazing and wonderful piece :D
I really did enjoy reading it. ^_^
Great work
-Cathrine

[Dupree]

Sorry hun, unlike others I'm not a fan of this piece. It's not bad I just think you can do way better, prove me right

[The Lone Wolf Prose]

I love this piece! The simplicity and almost primordial throwback to it had me seeing the naked essence of life in a way. very beautifully written and simple as it should be. Great work of art.

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

I liked this =). Great work.

[The Uncommon Muse]

I love the piece, wonderful images and flow ....the only line that threw me off was the last one....it jsut didnt seem to fit the rest of the poem.

[Dakota]

Great piece!

[deeps]

A interesting read here, like this

[Gomer LePoet]

short but sweet. we rise, walk and dance. some of us not that well unfortunately.

[alesuriko]

Nicely done sir. I really liked the rhythm and flow of this poem. The last line disrupted the flow for me, it didn't feel like it went with the rest of the poem or fit the rhythm at all. Also, there should be an apostrophe in "the earths hard rock." But I adored the imagery of this piece. Vivid yet vague and the rhythmic flow of the poem is really great, it feels like it has a rocking motion to it that ebbs and flows and moves so smoothly. I really liked this one, it's got great potential.