The Visitor

The Visitor

A Story by ShaneBerry
"

while i as watching a ghost hunters episode, i realized how rude it must seem to ghosts when they go up into the attic or abandon house and uproot their privacy... I DO NOT BELIEVE IN GHOSTS.

"
The Visitor


Three hundred years ago I died,
it was a warm summer eventide.
The leash rapped round my neck,
My mind an emotional wreck.
Last year entered the peeress,
in a long, shiny blue dress.
She cried tears,
and I whipped them away.
We talked,she was not afraid.
But she is gone, 
no more,
now you are here?
With your radio,
and camera gear?
Who are you to invade my home?
To call me out,
and claim your own.
You threaten,
or offer,
how can you help?
to Save me from this cage my hand hath dealt?
I throw and a shout, but you just smile,
you say you will leave in “a little wile”
whats your rush? 
You wanted to see,
is this not cruel irony?
My whole life I was ignored, 
until my mortal body was no more!

© 2011 ShaneBerry


Author's Note

ShaneBerry
i say i dont believe, but i guess it could be possible, i just think that if they were real they would have let me know along time ago lol,

any ways, what did yall think?

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I liked the fact that in the end, the ghosts states that people actually started paying attention to him when he died, when it's actually too late. Also, I'd point out that while is misspelled in line 6 from below.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Clap! Clap! Clap! I've often thought about this myself. Interesting piece. A few typos, but really good rant through poetry. Kudos. Going to send you one slightly along these lines. Slightly. It's called "The Spectre". Kudos.

Posted 14 Years Ago


quite an intriguing take on this! I enjoyed it and I do believe in ghosts and I can imagine quite a few think this way!

Posted 14 Years Ago


there are way too many mysteries in this world to just toss away things we do not understand. even the things we think we understand, do we really? just look around, what do you see? mysteries everywhere.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is quite the insteresting write here. I like it, very well written.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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bey
the rudeness to disturb the dead, ive often thought the same. i enjoyed the poem, thanks for the request.


-bey

Posted 14 Years Ago


I believe sweet, this is great! I often think the same myself!
Who are we to disturb those we possibly wouldn't have known or wish to know in the flesh!
I love this, a great poem:)
xx

Posted 14 Years Ago


hmm..this was an interesting "story" though i don't see how it could quite be classified a*s such. it's more like a poem, but i really the message and the flow of it. good job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like the sentiment - if they did exist it would be us haunting them.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on June 12, 2010
Last Updated on September 11, 2011
Tags: ghost, haunting, story, death, hunters, adventure, scary, sad, old, ghoul, monster, creepy, abandoned, suicide.

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ShaneBerry
ShaneBerry

denton, TX



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My Chemical Romance “The Ghost of You” Name: Shane Douglas Berry Age: Born on 8/4/1992 Hair color: Brown Eye color: Green Skin color: White, Freckled Tattoos: Oroborus (red, center.. more..

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