Time

The Criminal Of Time

Time

The shimmer and shine,

Will Cripple the Prime.

With discovery, and truth sublime.

A  Smooth Criminal,

Murder, his Crime.

The criminal is Time.

Author's Note

it is poetry, so idk if grammar realty matters as much lol, im working on it though!! :)

Reviews

[Tali Katzman]

Time sure is a criminal.
It's a bit short for me to say anything else execpt 'time is a criminal who's crime is murder',I don't know honestly,though there is a balance of good and the bad in the poem :)

[KatiePie]

really love this, it's short and simple, and yes lol grammar does matter very much in poetry lol and I really like how your poems seem so simple because their short and use words that are often used but they have such amazing meaning. It's beautiful how you capture the things that cross our minds but are never thought of to the proper extent.
Very great write!
Thought provoking poetry!
-Cathrine

[Dupree]

Short simple and to the point. My kind of poem! It's true enough

[Kanattas Atir Enomo]

i agree with snapjack. poetry's all in the wording. i like the message you sent here. "the criminal is Time" i really liked that line. good job.

[snapjack]

Poetry depends on how you word the words and how you spell them; it's all in the meaning of the poem. This poem is pretty good and very true. We all suffer in the long run with time. Very nice

[Devons]

Grammar does matter a great deal in poetry - poetry is meaning in words!!! However, I don't think you need concern yourself with that here - this a very good poem. A wealth of powerful meaning is compounded within just a few short lines, and the style and use of words puts across its message very cleanly, incisively and surprisingly. A very good piece of work.