Red Dawn
A Poem by
ShaneBerry
One hero dies, another must rise!
Red Dawn
One hero dies,
Another will rise.
Like the phoenix,
From the ash.
Two destinies,
Must clash.
The blade,
Is drawn.
At the mornings,
Red dawn.
© 2010 ShaneBerry
Author's Note
Hmmmm, What do Ya'll think?
Reviews
This is very descriptive for a short piece and this is a very deep realistic piece of writing. One hero may die but on the other side a hero rises.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Nice rhyming;
All in all, really powerful, especially for such a short poem.
I'm really enjoying your writing so far!
Great job. :D
Posted 14 Years Ago
Nice rhyming;
All in all, really powerful, especially for such a short poem.
I'm really enjoying your writing so far!
Great job. :D
Having a hard time understanding the part with the Phoenix. I always understood the rise of the Phoenix as a representation of new life begin anew or as more interesting meaning it was to represent the downtrodden overcoming oppression. Other than that, not a bad piece.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Having a hard time understanding the part with the Phoenix. I always understood the rise of the Phoenix as a representation of new life begin anew or as more interesting meaning it was to represent the downtrodden overcoming oppression. Other than that, not a bad piece.
A very strong poem. It feel like a beginning to a story of a rise to power. The feel of battle is strong in your words. A excellent poem.
Coyote
Posted 14 Years Ago
A very strong poem. It feel like a beginning to a story of a rise to power. The feel of battle is strong in your words. A excellent poem.
Coyote
I like the similie with the Phoenix. :)
Nice write.
Posted 14 Years Ago
I like the similie with the Phoenix. :)
Nice write.
one hero is dying while another is rising .. nice thought .. but wonder what happens with villains !! none of them dies and they keep on growing :D
Posted 14 Years Ago
one hero is dying while another is rising .. nice thought .. but wonder what happens with villains !! none of them dies and they keep on growing :D
Now that was good! Truly! Blessed be, Fallon
Posted 14 Years Ago
Now that was good! Truly! Blessed be, Fallon
Nice. and nice ryhmes scheme. I understand Berry.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Nice. and nice ryhmes scheme. I understand Berry.
wow i like it
Posted 14 Years Ago
wow i like it
Randy's Princess-well, poetry has a different meaning for everyone, for me, this resembles honor and the cycle of life.
Posted 14 Years Ago
Randy's Princess-well, poetry has a different meaning for everyone, for me, this resembles honor and the cycle of life.
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Added on June 2, 2010
Last Updated on June 2, 2010
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ShaneBerry denton, TX
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Name: Shane Douglas Berry
Age: Born on 8/4/1992
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Eye color: Green
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