Creepy Thoughts Creep, Creepily

wanted something dark?

Drops fall, down from the sky,

Bullets, Arrows, Stones all fly!

A little push, a lot of fire!

They kill each other for their great empire!

 

Its heavier than water,

Thicker than milk.

Do you feel ashamed?

For all the blood you have spilt?

 

Spiders crawling on you,

They're tickling your brain!

They bite, bite and BITE you!

But you cant feel a thing!

 

The bodies piled higher!

Graves littering the earth!

Maggots swimming through them!

Turning up the dirt!

 

The stench will fill your nose,

And pain will fill your heart!

The cries of countless bodies,

Will tear your mind apart!

 

You say its for a purpose?

For love or holy gain!

You say you'll be forgiven,

That it doesn't sound insane!

 

The blood evaporates,

The clouds all turn red!

The children will sleep soundly,

"Safely" in their beds.

 

Distant cracks and whistles,

The bombs of Holy War.

Will shatter all these children,

Its all been done before!

 

So listen very soundly,

To what they broadcast on the news,

For every body counted,

Ten have not been viewed!

Author's Note

i wanted to see if i could make a scary/creepy deep poem, did i succeed?

Reviews

[DJ]

It doesn't sound creepy, it sounds real. You have captured the essence of war/dark reality of life. This is happening in many countries around the world, both historically and in the present day, not only in war but also in some people's daily lives due to the 'power' others lord over them. Its good, I like the words you chose to use, nice flow and your message is very powerfully portrayed.