My Brothers

For my brothers, Tray and Trevyn :) from you sister

Laying back

LIstening to some tunes

It the only way to go

 

Hanging out together

Lots of nuggies

and slug bugs in the car

 

Dipping warm  Choclate chip cookies

In cold milk

Cookies falling apart in your mouth

 

Playing video games,

Card games,

Watching movies on the laptop

 

Starting new schools

Sticking together

in the lunch room

 

Rapping, singing, beat boxing

Hip-hop, Rap, Rock

Jamming to our own tunes

But yet making our own music together

 

Hanging out together

lots of nuggies

and slug bugs in the car

 

Can I borrow this?

Can I borrow that?

Of course you can

 

Hot pockets, Pizza, and dorritos

Pepsi, mountain dew and dr pepper

Crazy friday nights

 

Its what we do

 

Slug Bug

 

Reviews

[Shellie]

I actually like where you are going with this. I had some questions ready but I saw it was unfinished so I will just point out what I was thinking. Even though its unfinished I'm wondering where your title 'Siblings' fits in. It seems you are alone and I was thinking to intertwine the title in you would have to make some reference to Siblings being there. I know you dont have to really use the title within a poem, people sometimes dont but I feel this theme was to capture the quality of brothers and sisters time together....chilling talking etc. Thats only a thought now mind. Apart from that I really just like the poem as it was, without the title you chose its perfect but with the title it does need extra input! I hope that helps. The part with the cookies made me crave Tollhouse cookies and that essence in a poem is very genius.