letting go

I say I am bad,
That I don't deserve the things others do
Because I don't know how to tell you,

That I want to be good.
I want those things other girls have.
To be loved.

It just means I'm a failure though,
I can't have those things.
I won't let myself.

You ask me,
Why?
All the time.

And it's the same rehersed awnser every time.
I'm not good enough,  You're good, I'm bad.
We don't fit together.

But the truth is,
I won't let myself have it
Unless you're there with me.

I know, you deserve better.
Which is why I will let you go.

Reviews

[Emily]

I say I am bad,
That I don't deserve the things others do --
Because I don't know how to tell you,

That I want to be good.
I want those things other girls have.
To be loved.

It just means I'm a failure though,
I can't have those things.
I won't let myself.

You ask me,
Why?
All the time.

And it's the same rehersed awnser every time.
I'm not good enough,
You're good, I'm bad.
We don't fit together.

But the truth is,
I won't let myself have it
Unless you're there with me.

I know, you deserve better.
Which is why I will let you go.

This is very good. You asked for some grammar checking and there it is. I changed a few things based on English grammar. You + are = You're. Your is like saying possession, your dog, or your coat. You're is saying you and are together. You are a talented writer. You are very creative.

I like the idea behind this piece, you've done well writing and expressing the emotions behind this piece. You really feel as though you have nothing on these girls, when you're probably the girl they think they cannot get. Often times, we are the opposite of what we think. more people look up to you than you may know.

I really liked the idea that you have the "same rehearsed answer" every time you're asked the question. Nice work, hope those corrections make sense. If you want any more info on the changes, please let me know :-).