Tear Me Apart

Tear me apart
and glue me together

So what if a few pieces
have gone missing?

So what if a few pieces
have been misplaced?

So what if a few pieces
have been put upside down?

Tear me apart
but glue me together

Turn me into a puzzle
and carve me open

Cut me
Cut me into multiple pieces

Feel free with the sizes
Feel free with the shapes
Feel free with the dimensions

Feel free

To tear me apart.

Tear me with a knife
a dagger

Tear through me with a shotgun
or your hands

Plunge your nails into my bowels
and litter out their secrets

Tear me apart
and enjoy

Enjoy the sight
Enjoy the act

Enjoy

Enjoy the feeling.

Tear me

Tear me with the laser of your eyes
the anger of your face

Lacerate me
leave your marks
leave a scar

Tear me apart

I don't like being transparent.

Author's Note

Would that unconditional love? Any behaviour is better than being ignored...

For:
The One who tears things apart
Yet keeps everything together

The one who
Cut my heart in thousands of pieces
Because one heart couldn't love her enough...

:)

Reviews

[None]

Honestly, this:

For:
The One who tears things apart
Yet keeps everything together

The one who
Cut my heart in thousands of pieces
Because one heart couldn't love her enough...

should be part of the poem!

This is really good. The whole idea of breaking things to put them back together again is really good. It reminds me of how sometimes things have to be broken to be fixed... and much more. Here are a few things that I noticed. Mind you, they are just suggestions, no more.

- The "so what" part seems a little disjointed. Experiment with listing them or something, and add more, maybe some that contradict each other! That part of the poem is awesome.

- There are a few words that I think ould be trimmed down that would make the poem flow more. Example: "Tear me apart,/ but glue me back together," you don't need "but". Another: Cut me/ Cut me into pieces. In some places, the repetition is good, but others. Let the words imply and carry though and repeat themselves in the mind of the reader.

- One thing that I thought would fit was "cut me with your tongue." lol. Just a thought... sorry. There are so many things that could "cut a person apart" in a relationship. I knew someone who had to get stitches from their fiance's toe nail! Just saying.

Loved this. Thank you. The carefree, but serious implications of this poem make my heart happy. Love is a dissection table. You can only hope you don't become a Frankenstein in the end.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Harsh images here .. You seem to "want" someone to take their anger out on you ...You are a puzzle indeed ..

Sad Verse ... Jasmine

[Pratik]

Its an unique of its kind I have read here...Often in love, in relationships we suffer.. but that's no reason to run away from them even if we get hurt.. that is my understanding... great job .. :)

[paradise]

Damn this is good It rele came ouut good i liked the way you wrote it and how irt explains everything

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

its a very powerful yet sad poem...AMAZING!!

[Audrey Howitt]

Brutal and powerful poem. Well done!

[BabyBluee]

wow I loved the harsh imagery you used to display ur emotions...I love how you were really able to sum up the person in your life who tears you apart and keeps you together all at once...unfortunately that usually is a poisonous relationship

[Jeremy Baker]

Another well crafted and expressed set of ideas. The imagery is wonderful and unusual, making this reader have to work hard to visualise what i'm reading. Fantastic poem!

[Rene Velez]

damn, this is brutal in parts, imaginative and sad, well written...

[LilMissWriter17]

Really good :) Love the imagery!

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

beautiful and sad I really like your poem great imagery good flow nice structure reminds me of a poem I wrote "Broken Pieces" I would like to know what you think of mine lol