Break The Bottle

Stand up
Stand up and fall

Fall
In the eyes
Fall in the eyes of alcohol
But stand

On the ground

Stand up
And count

Count

The empty bottles
That fall you

Your honour

Empty the bottles
In the gutter

Make not
A stomach of your gutter

Get the guts
To stand up

And count

On yourself

Stay away from the ground
Bury the bottle
But not in your stomach

Stand up against
The bottle
Stand up
For yourself

Shy away
And make the bottle shy

Fight

And break
The bottle
Not yourself

Break the bottle
On your hand
And stand firm

Someone please

Cleanse my blood
The alcohol poisons
The poison of pain
Which poisons
The poison of love

Someone help
Me

Stand up

Author's Note

Just playing with words...

Reviews

[realmwriter]

I can certainly attest to breaking the bottle; to break the habbit, to break yourself from taking another drink...! I grew up with an alcholic mother, bottle always in her hand or at her lips... A lot of heartache came from that bottle and from her delerium of alcoholism. It is a painful slap in the face of past resentment and a hurt that will forever be in the back of my mind. But today she drinks no more and I have forgiven her for the pain and the abuse she put myself and my siblings through due to heavy drink. Today I have my mother back and I am most greatfull that she was able to finaly break the bottle...!

[Sakib]

Nice wordings. I liked how you expressed it. Nice write.

[Dove]

I love the message your piece gives. This is beautifully written, great job

[johnnyqueer]

If you were to read this at some poetry gig... I would most definitely give you snaps. I love the message, and how this was written. Fantastic.

[Richielee]

i liked your play on words very much, very interesting insight

[Sindhuja Seshadri]

Well played with the words. I like the battle between the bottle and the better-sense. Tho' sometimes I did wonder if the 'bottle' refered to more than the just a bottle, but also some internal shackle that one has to overcome!

[Dushyant Thadani]

Interesting play of words... Technically this isn't a poem, but on a more personal note you've played with words in such a way that you've personalized this very well... So on that note, a great write...