Break The Bottle

Break The Bottle

A Poem by ShameemAkhtar

Stand up
Stand up and fall


Fall
In the eyes
Fall in the eyes of alcohol
But stand


On the ground


Stand up
And count


Count


The empty bottles
That fall you


Your honour


Empty the bottles
In the gutter


Make not
A stomach of your gutter


Get the guts
To stand up


And count


On yourself


Stay away from the ground
Bury the bottle
But not in your stomach


Stand up against
The bottle
Stand up
For yourself


Shy away
And make the bottle shy

Fight


And break
The bottle
Not yourself


Break the bottle
On your hand
And stand firm


Someone please


Cleanse my blood
The alcohol poisons
The poison of pain
Which poisons
The poison of love


Someone help
Me


Stand up

© 2011 ShameemAkhtar


Author's Note

ShameemAkhtar
Just playing with words...

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I can certainly attest to breaking the bottle; to break the habbit, to break yourself from taking another drink...! I grew up with an alcholic mother, bottle always in her hand or at her lips... A lot of heartache came from that bottle and from her delerium of alcoholism. It is a painful slap in the face of past resentment and a hurt that will forever be in the back of my mind. But today she drinks no more and I have forgiven her for the pain and the abuse she put myself and my siblings through due to heavy drink. Today I have my mother back and I am most greatfull that she was able to finaly break the bottle...!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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nice one ...


Posted 13 Years Ago


Mind blowing Piece... Nice to go through..

Posted 13 Years Ago


cool:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I've never actually known anyone who's struggled with alcoholism well, but some very close family members suffer from other terrible addictions, and it's the same thing, though obviously different circumstances. The thing I really like about this poem is that it's natural- it doesn't try to be a good poem- it just is, which I believe is the crucial difference. Good job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Fighting alcoholism, as fighting any other addiciton, is an incredibly long and often painful process. The battle gets easier but is never "won"!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I can certainly attest to breaking the bottle; to break the habbit, to break yourself from taking another drink...! I grew up with an alcholic mother, bottle always in her hand or at her lips... A lot of heartache came from that bottle and from her delerium of alcoholism. It is a painful slap in the face of past resentment and a hurt that will forever be in the back of my mind. But today she drinks no more and I have forgiven her for the pain and the abuse she put myself and my siblings through due to heavy drink. Today I have my mother back and I am most greatfull that she was able to finaly break the bottle...!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This seems to be related to alcoholism, at least that what I get out of this. Its a harsh reality. Know too many people dealing with it. Great write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Playing or not this is an outstanding write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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You really hit the nail on the head. Thank you. Not only that extremely well written with clever verbal twists and turns that make reading it aloud a true pleasure. As much as reading it on the page.

Posted 13 Years Ago


great right on a serious disease and subject...well done. (I meant right)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Port Louis, Mauritius



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