The Whirlpool

I fell in love

Once

When I was still young

And strong

I fell in a whirlpool
In a whirlpool I fell

My heart got distraught
My brains went on holidays

I fell
And fell deeper

I fell in a cauldron
And seeped the lava of love

And I blew
Until I blew up

I whirled in a pool
My hands set out to clasp

Yours.

But they got thin air
In a pool
Where feelings whirled

And I fell
Against my own weight

I fell in love with an illusion
And it eluded me all my life

I fell in love with life
And I fell

Deep in a volcano
Of jealousy

Until it spit me out
Magma once, lava now

And I fell
On my feet

But they couldn’t resist
The weight of responsibility

My legs gave way
As I cranked under pressure

Until

I was finally felled
By a reality

My illusion
Had been nothing but
An illusion

And I fell
In a trance
As the whirlpool
Swept me off my legs
And took me away in its arms
On a trip
Along the carousel of life and death

I fell in love
With the whirlpool

And embraced life

Whirl me around
But love me

So what if I get dizzy?

Reviews

[realmwriter]

I like the spacing and pace of each stanza, kinda makes it seem like it was all a dream. Reads that way to me as well. Very dream. Course when I wake up my head feels like its in a dream for at least five minutes. The whirlpool is a nice touch, adds yet another layer to a dreamscape that you have laid out in these words. Awesome write man

[EMF]

A wonderful write, expecially with the imagry of love as a whirlpool. Sheer perfection. Each line swirls around my head, the same way it whirls around in love. Stunning work. As always, with a style all of your own

[stars are far]

nice piece :)

[topsyturvy]

Ahhhh so beautiful, mixed with a lot of swirling emotions :)

[Cosmic Dreamer]

Amazing poem! I also think that love is a whirlpool (its strange how people have similar idea). Thank you for writing this poem and sharing it, it has brightened up my day a bit, reading a brilliant poem. Well done!

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Nice combination with underneath the whirlpool blues and bubbles....

[Dark Beauty]

Excellent write with great expression!

[Audrey Howitt]

The whirlpool of desire, the whirlpool of love, of death, of life--I like the analogy. Nice write!

[DarkAngel]

You wont fall again.... Good poem :)

[~*. Jade Black .*~]

wonderful poem! great write here it was like images were flowing within the abyss of my mind. Good job

[Science girl]

This painted so many images in my mind. Thanks so much for the share, I enjoyed this very much so!