Pluck My Eye

Pluck my eye
And play marble

Aim

And

Strike

Aim and strike
With the marble of my eye

Strike her

Strike her rock
Rock her stride

Break her

Rock

Rock her frolics

Survive her heart
-break
Her heart

Into

Pebbles

Gravels

Go to the jeweler

Pick my eye
Polish her rocks

Glisten my marble
Pump the purple of her heart
In the flesh of my marble

Stone
Her rock

Pluck my eye
And aim

Someone
Hand me
A help
Lend me
a hand
-le

handle

The beat

Beat
The heart
Beat

Pluck my eye

Play my marble

I don’t have a hand

Author's Note

Your eyes can speak too...

Imagine two people conversing with their eyes where one loves the other and the other does not.

One pair of eyes tries to melt conquer the other while the other tries to break don the one...

Reviews

[Rene Velez]

I like the wordplay.....

[RienKelsoCinema]

WIth one quick look into her eyes can get you lost in them for days. Thep ower of beauty can override your thoughts with one swift look. Interesting.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I must admit I felt a little lost with this one. I'm just not sure of the comparison between eyes and gems...or maybe I'm not reading this as correctly as I thought. I think I get it in a small way. Great write!

[CT]

The raw, bleeding imagery that runs through both this poem and the last one I reviewed is wonderfully graphic in it's depictions and does an absolutely marvelous job of driving each piece's emotional core. Another poem well done.

[johnnyqueer]

This is so different than most styles I encounter, so its refreshing in a way. When poems are written as such they only make sense when read aloud, at least for me haha. I liked this one quite a bit as well :)

[~*. Jade Black .*~]

Truly amazing great job I loved it from beginning to end even the way you wrote it and the structure of it.

[MS. BABy]

i love the tone and structure in which u write, awesome read....

[Sindhuja Seshadri]

A nice poem. I didnt like the idea of plucking out the eye tho~ :)

[.]

interesting concept..helped with the authors note..