Pluck My Eye

Pluck my eye
And play marble

Aim

And

Strike

Aim and strike
With the marble of my eye

Strike her

Strike her rock
Rock her stride

Break her

Rock

Rock her frolics

Survive her heart
-break
Her heart

Into

Pebbles

Gravels

Go to the jeweler

Pick my eye
Polish her rocks

Glisten my marble
Pump the purple of her heart
In the flesh of my marble

Stone
Her rock

Pluck my eye
And aim

Someone
Hand me
A help
Lend me
a hand
-le

handle

The beat

Beat
The heart
Beat

Pluck my eye

Play my marble

I don’t have a hand

Author's Note

Your eyes can speak too...

Imagine two people conversing with their eyes where one loves the other and the other does not.

One pair of eyes tries to melt conquer the other while the other tries to break don the one...

Reviews

[Sleepless]

i seen that and it really is sad but like they say love i blind and to tell you the truth my aunt is believign thsi guy who is only siing her but she doesnt know it i like the poem its original and it holds a great meaning !:)

[realmwriter]

Differant and in a very cool way. I like it!

[Daytonight]

Thank you for sharing with me. Keep on penning.

[Pratik]

Well written.. I was reading the poem along different lines until I read your note... Eyes are truly the gates to a person's heart.. i agree! Nice one my friend :)

[Dayran]

The eyes as representative of the true is not new. It is exercised in our experiences of the logos that comes to combine with ethos to define its relationship and character. Eventually it is our experience of the world. A poem that explores the borders of the experience of the logos.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

I had some inkling of a thought this had something to do with love, and then after reading your author's note it started to make a lot more sense. I admire your style. Nicely done.


~Anna Rose

[Alewis]

this was an okay write but good job :)

[Jeremy Baker]

"The marble of my eye .. ' The jewels ... such marvelous imagery. Quite brilliant, my friend!

[Libby McKeown]

One more thing. The note explaining the metaphor kinda detracts from the mystery. Just my humble estimation.

[Libby McKeown]

I really like it! (of course, I do; I write the same way). I enjoy the breaks like "break her/rock" and "hand/le". You have a very elegant and smooth rhythm, and while this style looks so easy, it can be so hard to get right, to polish it just right. That takes talent, which you have. Keep writing.