Let's Waltz

 

Oh picture, picture in my mind,

      Unroll gently to reveal yourself

Glimpse my love that I can’t find,

      Shades of lofty mountains high

Sky so vast and clouds so blue

      Above all these, where we could fly,

Dreams of love and kisses sweet,

      Hugs so tight and a peaceful sleep,

Oh bring that on as a visual treat!

 

 

With closed eyes dreamt our tale,

      Swinging in mind’s boundless lands

Loves album of dreams unveil,

      Moist kiss gently touching wet eyes,

Gently presented himself in front

      Where joys invade and tear flies,

He said “No need of a dreamy dream

      Let our reality dance to a love filled note

Waltzing the floor so swift and stream”

 

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AWARDS/BADGES WON:

2nd Place

Jun 27, 2011

• Love and Dance
• Let's Waltz

Reviews

[Beatles9322]

This is so beautiful, wet and gorgeous!

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Magical. That's what it was like reading the poem. I think it should be 'With eyes closed WE dreamt our tale' and 'Let our reality dance to A love filled note' .love the poem though.

[Adelia Alighieri]

Such profound use of words. The words seem like waltzing themselves. Well done!

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Except for the line
Above all these, where we did fly,
I like the poem. I would avoid that antiquated verb form, "did fly."
Maybe say instead, "where we could fly."

[Kelly M.]

I liked this a lot! Sweet, nice flow and just beautiful. You rhymed really well! This was a great write! :) 100/100!

[Magdelena]

First let me say, the pic is fab! So dreamy. Second, this piece. My oh my! It was a delight to read. images were perfection. I love how you put your pen forth. never seem to stop amazing me..

Wonderful job.

Mags xx

[Tina Kline]

This is very dreamy and romantic just like a dream of a lover should be.. But the dream seems to end in reality here, there really is a someone! This is so very beautiful and very romantic I love it! Fantastic job on this!

[Monday Night]

It's so wonderful. I liked the way it flows and how lovely it is throughout the whole poem. Wonderful job! And I love the picture, too, by the way.

[emmajoy]

That is soooooo lovely .. like a waltz of words, drifting and holding, romantically and sincerely, ' Dreams of love and kisses sweet, ~ Hugs so tight and a peaceful sleep, ~ Oh bring that on as a visual treat! '

Your writing's always so tender, such a pleasure to read. Love the picture and the font too, they add a very special something. Thank you very much for sharing

[Sukriti Suki]

A really nice one. I read ' Picture in my mind, gently unroll'...and then I realise the font is like an old scroll, unfolding. Nice!!