You, Me & our Maple Tree

I sat under a maple tree,
Trying to write a poem
Setting my mind free,
Jotted down a few words,
Suddenly they wiggled and juggled
Rising high in air like birds.

♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥                                      I looked up in awe,
♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥                         Looking at the words in the air,
♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥                      Couldn’t believe in what I saw,
   ♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥                          They fluttered around my head,
♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥                          Making teeny weeny moves,
♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥                   Then ordered like beads in a thread.

Fast and smooth they went,
Carrying my thoughts to you,
Like the messenger I’ve sent,
I attached a loving kiss to its tail,
Sending my love to you,
To reach you, zoom they'll sail.

♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥      Even the words knew how much I miss you,
      ♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥              It flew up and high, into the fluffy clouds,
   ♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥               This kind of longing for you isn’t new,
♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥             A maple leaf came swooping down on me,
♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥       Then I realized that the words still lay here
♡♥   ♡♥   ♡♥                      Only after the leaf fell on my knee.

This tree has lots of memories to remind,
Fresh among it was the last time we kissed,
It always gave shade like a friend so kind,
Now am sitting alone, wishing that you were here,
To accompany me and this friendly tree,
Come back soon to talk, laugh and cheer.

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Awards / Badges won:


Longing For Love ~ Silver Star

Jul 24, 2010

• Longing For Love
• You, Me & our Maple Tree

Roses Are Red Award

Aug 15, 2010

• LOVE POEMS
• You, Me & our Maple Tree

Best Romantic Comedy

Jun 12, 2011

• Romantic + ?
• You, Me & our Maple Tree

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

Lovely poem! I like your use of the maple leaf falling on your knee to jolt you back to your present loneliness.

[SOUL LESS]

Very nice flow...though improve the third stanza a lil: the last line specifically. The rhyme scheme is unusual and rather jarring in some areas.
It's a terribly nice poem and I'm sure you'll improve with time.
Inspiring...

[deeps]

I already reviewed this write, but why not review it again, I like this especially the first stanza.

[Steph Michelle]

Its really nice. I love how cute it is. Its like deep but nice and light. Great Work!! Keep it up.

[A.Lee]

It took me a minute to find a rhythm for this poem. It seemed a little jagged. But I absolutely love the poem itself. How cute and romantic! It just had such an enchanting feel to it and the imagery was just amazing. I could really see the words fluttering off the page as you're watching in awe. Nice work.

[HorrorMaster]

A very lovely poem

[Poetic Beauty]

this is a very sweet poem with so much happiness and the setting is such a romantic place and the moment is one of those magical ones that you will never forget.

[Daydreamer54]

Aw, a very cute poem! The colors and the picture reminds me of fall. Great write! :)

[An owl on the moon]

What a beautifully, lifting write! You create the feeling of both wondrous history and the joy of the moment.. that richness that is true love, shared with all the self. This was a joy to read and to imagine this amazing place..