Stars in my Stud!

Walking around the place with pride,
To become like me, others really tried,
The level of confidence that I had,
Was something I liked and was glad!

I colored my life with the shades from the rainbow,
The happiness of my life, I never let it go
Planted within me the seeds of faith and trust,
Never did I gave room to money or lust…

If you think this is all about you,
Better change your view,
Cause its about me and not just you.

I dreamed of having stars in my stud,
Our love always fresh like rose bud.

I fell in love with none but you,
Lovers like us are rare and few,
They called us a lovely and a perfect pair,
Our pure love spread all over the air..

Your bounty love and care I owned,
Pure love like ours can never be cloned,
Days and years went so fast,
Still our love was deep and vast…

If you think this is all about you,
Better change your view,
Cause its about me and not just you.

I dreamed of having stars in my stud,
Our love always fresh like rose bud.


Vanity Awards ~ Conceited Fool

Jul 16, 2010

• Clouds In My Coffee
• Stars in my Stud!

excellent write

Jul 20, 2010

• little poetry
• Stars in my Stud!

Author's Note

This poem was written inspired from the song "clouds in my coffee"

Reviews

[deeps]

This has a wondeful flow. I enjoyed the write.

[Simple_mee]

A nice flow ... especially iked the energy that travels through the words. The change in the mood is b'fully reflected!
Great work!

[R E Tree]

Wow I like the tone you have created it starts with a calm tone then the tone starts to get more conversational and more angry. It shows how the poets feelings change all of sudden from the poet thinking deeper about the poem they are writing. I find it very clever and amusing. It is very rare that I see the poets feelings change so strongly. The emotions get carried through out the poem making it stand out.

[Wicahpi]

Thank you for your entry into "Clouds In My Coffee" contest.
This rhymes so nicely and is actually sweet! A Twist :)
I like that, too, 'if you think this is about you ...' it sings.
Well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. I like the story and the excellent ending. I like the statement.
"If you think this is all about you,
Better change your view,
Cause its about me and not just you"
Sometime we need to grasp it all to understand our world. A outstanding poem.
Coyote