Mermaid Love ♥♥♡

I relished being a fish,
swimming deep into seas,
crossing the turquoise borders
immersing into the emerald surface,
touching the spongy seagrass,
tickling the coral reefs.

I swirled up and high
dancing in glory
felt like touching the amethyst sky,
splashing the waters around,
causing ripples and waves,
there I saw you shimmering in moonlight.

My whole world missed a beat,
looking into your sea blue eyes,
fell into the oceans of love,
the touch of your hands,
gentle caress on my bosom,
bloomed within me a thousand flowers.

As your fingers slid down,
down my satin fresh skin,
I wished to no longer stay a mermaid,
I followed you to the shore,
fins fluttering in merriment,
you winked and I swam faster.

My souls touched the ecstasy,
heart beating in the rhythm of love,
you gestured me to leave,
but how could I???
I waited there till you left,
twitched, twirled, whirled, breathless …

Caught in the net you’d earlier spread,
washing to the shore,
heart beating fast,
faster, aching for one first last kiss,
capturing your image in my heart,
eyes turning cold, dropping down in thought of you…
























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Jun 28, 2010

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• Mermaid Love ♥♥♡

Cobalt Award

Jul 2, 2010

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Jul 25, 2010

• What's in a rhyme?
• Mermaid Love ♥♥♡

Author's Note

I don't know how far this is good, just wrote this while sitting idle...

Reviews

[Vitcky Walker]

wow!!!!! fantastic..very good pesonification....i like it so much

[A.Lee]

I actually really like this. I think it could use a little fine tuning, but overall its pretty good. I like that you were able to use the point of view of the mermaid instead of merely talking about one. Great work.

[Mayaway]

nice one :)

[Simple_mee]

Great imagery. u really have dun a b'ful job in creating some very vivid pictures of the world under the water. :)
I really enjoyed going thru this one !! x

[Tate Morgan]

Interewsting I like it ALRIGHT i THINK IT IS A BIT TOO LONG AND SHOULD BE TRIMMED

[Tina Kline]

You created a very beautiful underwater world for your mermaid. This is very romantic and rather sad at the end for the mermaid. Beautiful imagery. Fantastic job on this.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Very beautiful and I love mermaids and the idea of them...
This is sad for the mermaid.. knowing love yet part human and part fish ..
Love the images .. so beautiful ..

Chloe

[Wicahpi]

This is beautiful! Sometimes we write our best poetry 'sitting idle'.
Descriptive, full of lovely and peaceful images. The flow
is that of a calm sea...going in my favorites!

[Judy]

Well good for you, it is very beauiful.

[An owl on the moon]

You create such a beautiful flow... truly took me away for awhile to another world... It's also filled with emotion, that desire and passion that drives love to the very edge of existence.. willing to give all.. Wonderfully done. Only wished for more!