There are so many, yet so few, Some who we know, and some so new, But, why have I fallen for you?
Heart goes weak, when saying your name, For I have changed and, I'm not the same, Love is magical and not some silly game, But, why have I fallen for you?
Even with my eyes closed I can find
you in a crowd,
Hold your hands and say "I LOVE YOU" so loud,
To call you my love I really feel
proud,
But, Why have I fallen for you?
I am still within the love spell you’ve cast, My love for you is so deep and vast, This love of mine is true and will always last, But, why have I fallen for you?
Of all others you're precious and fully mine, With you near me, my life will always be fine, Our love is one, truly pure and divine, But, why have I fallen for you?
You play with me in showers of rain, Comfort me when in sorrow and pain, With your help my efforts will never go in vain, But, why have I fallen for you?
You were true, and always so good, The whole of who is me,you've best understood, You cared and shared all that you could, Maybe, that’s why I have fallen for you.
The first stanza, known as the mudanza, has three lines, rhyming aaa. All the other stanzas - as many of them as you like - have 4 lines, rhyming bbba, the a rhyme harking back to the first stanza. The overall rhyming scheme for the poem is aaa/bbba/ccca/ddda etc.
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I really liked this, especially the repetition of "Why have I fallen for you"
Can I make one suggestion, just my opinion, but, if you wrote it like this 'Why have I fallen for YOU?" it makes the point even clearer, like out of all the thousands, why did I pick YOU. I donno, just what I thought.
A really great poem, the rhymes were good, and the flow was perfect.
I only had trouble with the 3rd stanza where I felt like the rhyme was really pushed. maybe re write it or tweak it a bit.
but really good write overall.
keep it up!
This is like the most beautiful poem I have ever read. I got goosebumps all over me. You did a really good job here. I loved the repetition of "Why have I fallen for you," and then I love how at the end you explains the reasons of why maybe you have fallen for that person. I love the emotions you portrayed in here, very powerful, very romantic. Awesome Job, Keep writing :)
This is fantastic! Repeating the line 'why have I fallen for you?' and answering it at the end adds depth to this already beautiful love poem. Outstanding rhyming in this and its just a really tender, romantic love poem and I add I think it could very easily be lyrics for a love song too!
This is a beautiful write that is filled with love and the joy of finding the one... The repetition in the form makes it feel almost lyrical, and I could sense a certain music playing through it!
The questioning of why and the acceptance of what is when Cupid's arrow strikes are wonderfully penned here, Poet's World! And all in the zejel form! Thank you so much for trying the challenge!
Poem is beautiful. The feel of love and thankfulness in strong in your words. I like the flow of the words. A wise person knows when he is in paradise and do their best to hold on. Total poem is outstanding. I like it all. Thank you.
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I'm Shalini Dinesh, someone who finds joy in expressing thoughts and emotions through poetry. I have a deep love for colors, nature, and the calming sound of waves, all of which inspire my writing. My.. more..