Why Have I Fallen For You?

There are so many, yet so few,
Some who we know, and some so new,
But, why have I fallen for you?

Heart goes weak, when saying your name,
For I have changed and, I'm not the same,
Love is magical and not some silly game,
But, why have I fallen for you?

 

Even with my eyes closed I can find you in a crowd,

Hold your hands and say "I LOVE YOU" so loud,

To call you my love I really feel proud,

But, Why have I fallen for you?

I am still within the love spell you’ve cast,
My love for you is so deep and vast,
This love of mine is true and will always last,
But, why have I fallen for you?

Of all others you're precious and fully mine,
With you near me, my life will always be fine,
Our love is one, truly pure and divine,
But, why have I fallen for you?

You play with me in showers of rain,
Comfort me when in sorrow and pain,
With your help my efforts will never go in vain,
But, why have I fallen for you?

You were true, and always so good,
The whole of who is me,you've best understood,
You cared and shared all that you could,
Maybe, that’s why I have fallen for you.












6th

May 18, 2010

• Love Poems
• Why Have I Fallen For You?

2nd runner up

Jun 6, 2010

• True Lyrics
• Why Have I Fallen For You?

Little Girls Are Made of Award

Aug 18, 2010

• ROMANCE POETRY
• Why Have I Fallen For You?

Author's Note

The poetry was written for Zejel contest where,

The first stanza, known as the mudanza, has three lines, rhyming aaa. All the other stanzas - as many of them as you like - have 4 lines, rhyming bbba, the a rhyme harking back to the first stanza. The overall rhyming scheme for the poem is aaa/bbba/ccca/ddda etc.

Reviews

[MissWordSmith]

I really liked this, especially the repetition of "Why have I fallen for you"
Can I make one suggestion, just my opinion, but, if you wrote it like this 'Why have I fallen for YOU?" it makes the point even clearer, like out of all the thousands, why did I pick YOU. I donno, just what I thought.
A really great poem, the rhymes were good, and the flow was perfect.
I only had trouble with the 3rd stanza where I felt like the rhyme was really pushed. maybe re write it or tweak it a bit.
but really good write overall.
keep it up!

[JENY]

Your attempt to find out the reason for
Your love…….is very nice ….
It is a part of self understanding…..
A desire to find the reason behind..our own likes and dislikes….
You put it into a poem…..in an authentic way….

[The Water Queen]

This is beautiful and lovely to read. I enjoyed this to the fullest.

[The Perfectionist]

Your rhyming works. Your rhythm doesn't. Half of the time your third line is much longer than the previous two and it distorts the flow considerably. Also, several of the commas you have included could - and should - be removed. Something to think about.

[Christian Stout]

i love it. the flow is amazing the rhyming is great i wish i knew so mamy rhyms. but overall i think its the best i have read so far.

[Tiffini Danielle]

"You were true, and always so good,
The whole of who is me,you've best understood,
You cared and shared all that you could,
Maybe, that’s why I have fallen for you."
I had a little trouble with the above, it seemed slightly forced, but overall I really enjoyed this.
The repetition and ryhming scheme fit the mood of the poem well.

[Nathan Durham]

This was really good. It had really good feelings written in a nice flowing format. I really enjoy the style of the mudanza.

[Thorn]

This is beautiful. I'm envious of your skill. ^^

With you near me, my life will always be fine,
***
With this line, though, I think you could miss out the "my". It makes it sound a little clumsy.

Other than that, this poem was awesome! I really enjoyed reading it. ^^

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Very good poetry form.. a nice write.. chloe

[Wicahpi]

A very lovely Mudanza :)

[A.Lee]

This is wonderful! I absolutely loved it. One of my favorites, hands down. I loved the repetition of the last line and the way you slightly altered it in the last stanza. The flow was excellent. Theme, meter, rhyme-- all perfect. Excellent, excellent job on this one. If I could give you 110% I would. Nice work.