Finally

                     























                        Finally came our wedding day,
                              no more lonely walks
                        on Saturdays nor Sundays,
                               lets swan around
                          like clouds,
                        and wander in joy,
                       our bubbling hearts
                      will sing the yoyo song,
                            for we know
                nothing can lure our pure love!

Author's Note

wrote this poem for albert cafe's 10/40 words contest... i don't know if this is good, but yet gave it a try....

Reviews

[HorrorMaster]

Very beautiful wedding poem.

[Sofia N]

Great try. This poem is beautiful. I love the words and the meaning of it. Keep writing :)

[deeps]

This is wonderful, such an enjoyable read.

[Ian]

The poem was good. Once you have someone in your life you dont have to be alone any more

[Coyote Poetry]

You did outstanding with the words. The poem is written with strength and beauty in the words. I like the feel and the emotion in the poem. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[happy girl]

It is very good, you have nothing to worry about. I love the idea you have in this piece, about the newly weds. This is a good place to start. If anything, you could make it easier to read, but overall, very good job : D

[Wicahpi]

Great use of the 10/40 word contest!!
I think this very sweet. Good job