I traveled all way long, Joining hands with my family and friends, I traveled in the shadow, Shadow of others, In the road that was straight and single.
We had fun, We had fights, Even after nudging others We smiled after a while, Cause the road was straight and single.
Each had their goal, They’d clearly set their path, I never knew mine, Neither did I bother to find, I traveled along on the road straight and single.
Then came the time, Where crossroads had come, Each had their map, They traveled smoothly in their path, On the road that was earlier straight and single.
No one cared, no one asked If I need a hand to hold and walk, The time had come, To make my choice, to choose the path, From the road that’s no more straight and single.
I realized, I needed to walk my life, For no more people came along, For life is never always an easy song, Its my life, I decided to walk Away from the road that was straight and single.
Then came a clash, Clash between my mind and heart To select the path where I should walk, I paused, thought and decided to proceed The crossroad that was chosen by my heart.
I love the last stanza in this poem. I am the type of person that says you should always to with your heart and instincts they have a lot to say that we don't understand. The flow of this poem is easy to follow and the words express your complete thought. Great job.
I liked this write alot. It's so realistic and relat-able. I know what's going on in ur head as you write this. Sort of facing the same dilemma.. I dun usually do such a detailed review always but I lliked this alot.. I would like to make my bit of contribution to it's perfection..
3rd para :: I traveled along in the road straight and single... on instead of in
4th para :: Where crossroad had come, .. either crossroads or a crossroad
:: In the road that was earlier straight and single.. in will be on
5th para :: to chose the path, .. "choose" sounds better ..
Life's full of crossroads isn't it, some we arrive at with other people, others alone as you did at the end. You built up your theme so well, and, the end is very touching, emotional, beautiful .. there's nothing like the heart for making certain decisions.
May I suggest you read some English modern poetry to understand meter more, the rythmn of written words. Most of your poem is very good but there are lines that could be shortened or lengthened.
Thank you so very much for letting me share this lovely piece of writing.
I'm Shalini Dinesh, someone who finds joy in expressing thoughts and emotions through poetry. I have a deep love for colors, nature, and the calming sound of waves, all of which inspire my writing. My.. more..