My Fair Maiden!

The old color faded arch
Looked even more dull on the
Gloomy summer evening,
With no one around nor the wind
That could cause ruckus and spoil
The scenic grace of such a lovely place…
 
There stands my maiden,
In her satin white wedding gown, so
Beautifully woven, to fit her
Perfectly carved figure,
With red-hot anger that slightly marred
Her recherché charm, will for sure cause no harm…
 
Her makeup and eye shadow
Complimented her ever splendid eyes,
The mask in her hand will no more be needed,
For eloping from her house had been successful,
Oh, I knew how furious she would be, for I have delayed
Leaving the fears apart, I should plan of how to safely depart.
 
 Make no noise, or galloping sound my silly bronco!
For it will alert my lady,
And spoil my secret admiration,
Oh, lady so fair, awesome and flawless,
My lovely gift ever from cupid,
Couldn’t stop but to love her more, to the depth of my heart’s core
 
From her behind, I shall sweep her feet
Hear her rebukes and even bear her kicks,
At last I shall kiss her lips,
Lock her words and know she’ll titter,
Will ride her to my wonderland
Keep her happy then ever, and her tears, oh there will be “NEVER”!



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AWARDS/ BADGES WON:


Mascarade ~ Gold Star

Mar 11, 2010

• Mascarade
• My Fair Maiden!

interesting

Apr 12, 2010

• Any Writing
• My Fair Maiden!

 Third Place 

Apr 17, 2010

• Any Poem
• My Fair Maiden!

Ivory Award

Jul 6, 2010

• WHITE
• My Fair Maiden!

Reviews

[Brittany DeFranco]

oh I just love this poem!! I hope my love thinks of me this way as much as you described in this poem, then again I know he does. This poem is amazing!! please keep writing, I love how you put your feelings into words.

[Avocations of Amber]

I love the storyline of this romantic piece. It is seemingly a testament to the playful and alluring nature of love at first sight. Very beautifully written and very descriptive...... :) I like this a lot....

[Brette Medb]

The imagery was wonderful... you created a vivid and enchanted story and the language suited the time. Beautifully done.

[Dev]

The details are very good. I love the way how it expresses love

"From her behind, I shall sweep her feet
Hear her rebukes and even bear her kicks,
At last I shall kiss her lips,
Lock her words and know she’ll titter,
Will ride her to my wonderland
Keep her happy then ever, and her tears, oh there will be “NEVER”!" My fav para :)

[E.J. Wallace]

Very nice. This poem reminds me of Arthurian literature. I like the line, "There stands my maiden." Very classic.

[Simple_mee]

Beautiful. I really enjoyed it.
You are just getting better with ur every write. The love and the depth of emotions is very well expressed.

[Ambrosia]

beautiful piece, delicate, ornate and flowing.

[Wicahpi]

What a beautiful poem!!
I enjoyed it from the first line until the last.
Nice job !! I enjoyed the story inspired by the image.
Good luck in the contest!!

[An owl on the moon]

Beautiful, with an epic feel and flow. Your words wonderfully speak of a love that is deep and rich...

[Brokensoul]

Your poem has a Victorian charm... After a long time I am reading such a thing beautiful!