My Fair Maiden!

The old color faded arch
Looked even more dull on the
Gloomy summer evening,
With no one around nor the wind
That could cause ruckus and spoil
The scenic grace of such a lovely place…
 
There stands my maiden,
In her satin white wedding gown, so
Beautifully woven, to fit her
Perfectly carved figure,
With red-hot anger that slightly marred
Her recherché charm, will for sure cause no harm…
 
Her makeup and eye shadow
Complimented her ever splendid eyes,
The mask in her hand will no more be needed,
For eloping from her house had been successful,
Oh, I knew how furious she would be, for I have delayed
Leaving the fears apart, I should plan of how to safely depart.
 
 Make no noise, or galloping sound my silly bronco!
For it will alert my lady,
And spoil my secret admiration,
Oh, lady so fair, awesome and flawless,
My lovely gift ever from cupid,
Couldn’t stop but to love her more, to the depth of my heart’s core
 
From her behind, I shall sweep her feet
Hear her rebukes and even bear her kicks,
At last I shall kiss her lips,
Lock her words and know she’ll titter,
Will ride her to my wonderland
Keep her happy then ever, and her tears, oh there will be “NEVER”!



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AWARDS/ BADGES WON:


Mascarade ~ Gold Star

Mar 11, 2010

• Mascarade
• My Fair Maiden!

interesting

Apr 12, 2010

• Any Writing
• My Fair Maiden!

 Third Place 

Apr 17, 2010

• Any Poem
• My Fair Maiden!

Ivory Award

Jul 6, 2010

• WHITE
• My Fair Maiden!

Reviews

[Lorraine]

It sounds stalker-ish with the way he was describing the fitting of her dress and the makeup on her face. Even so, you take descriptions into a whole new level of accuracy. I can already picture her figure in my head regardless of that picture you have (though I must say it's pretty accurate too). Amazing Poem.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is lovely! I enjoyed every line, word.. wonderful to read you again.

Chloe

[Magdelena]

Just beautiful....

Mags xx

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on this great winning poem. Well Done!

[A.Lee]

Lovely story... I love the way this is written. Good job :)

[HorrorMaster]

Very well written. Very beautiful indeed

[deeps]

This is written so well.
This is so wonderful and beuatiful.
Such a romantic write. Well written

[Comatose]

Wow...this poem is absolutely amazing! I entered this contest too, just didn't get a chance to view the other contestant's. Well done, and great imagery! ^^

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful poem .. it's more than a touch of the past, wrapped with love!

There are so many lines, stanzas, I could pick out as being wonderful and more, but then would have to put them all .. so, enough said .. this is a lovely poem and you've obviously taken such care with its birth.

[vyshu]

its was an everlasting poem i just loved it...