I can SEE

I can see, the sun’s rays brightening,
The rays that’s well and divinely being spread,
The stars at night, silvery and glistening,
Will also energize the person in deathbed,
The power that mesmerize,
Is something that nothing else can compromise!

I can see, the care and love that the mother shows,
The guidance and security that the father provides,
Is something that we can’t repay beyond owes
This fondness deep within resides,
What more bonds can you ask for?
This relationship continues from days of yore.

I can see, the beauty of friendship so green,
The company and attitude of sharing,
Your thoughts and heart so clean and is well seen,
The confidant in you, I can share any secret so daring,
The friend that walks all along
Not worrying about others and come with me for lifelong.

All of the above I can see,
The pure care and share, the fine shine,
With all this, my future I can foresee,
Am so happy that you are mine
The above all I can see, I can see them in your eyes,
The love so true, with no false, no guilt or lies.


Fantastic

May 13, 2010

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Reviews

[deeps]

I like this, it's very well written

[St.Jimmy]

its so pleasent and enjoyable to read this
I enjoyed every single line honestly (as you did)
the topic is kinda similar to my poem
but your poem is awesome
keep writing
~Aaradhya

[Therene]

Love does not have any malice, I agree. :D

Your exquisite use of simple words takes this poem on a pedestal raised for the world to admire. I commend you for the imagery you weaved into this one. For technicals, your rhyme and flow works really well.

Great write!

[Brittany DeFranco]

so beautiful and pleasent, I love it and that the flow and ryheme of the poem is so elegant and amazing. I want to write like you someday ^-^
Keep writing!

[G. Marie"floating on an..]

This is very elegantly done. A complex but simple message of life love of nature friends and family and your love of your life. I can see all of this in your descriptions so well !! love this poem!!!

[MagiCrystal]

Your flow is amazing.. I can see it
Love every word .. you choose to convey this beauty
I am glad you requested to me.. thank you
hands down 1 detail It reminds me of a Victorian days..
when all was blue... love it


magical

[Nicole Renee]

I really enjoyed this poem! And I agree, this poem had a elegance to its words.

[maryjaneuy]

I agree with Devyani. I also love those lines. I can see the elegance in this poem. :)
this is really amazing. well written and very heartfelt. :)

[The Water Queen]

Beautiful Poem. I love the flow and the elegance this poem portrays.

--The Angel of the Earth--

[Bette]

this is beautiful! well done