Wounded Warrior in Death Bed

This poem contain 26 words each word arranged carefully in alphabetical order starting from A, B.....Z

A bold combatant,

  disappeared eventually

      forgetting, glories & honor,

        into jaded, 

                kicked, 

                  lamentable mortality,

never obtained precious

    quintal rubies, sapphires!

       this unsatisfied vagabond,

         wished xanadu 

            yearned zizz.

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Reviews

[emmajoy]

Very clever and, near perfect. I can't and won't comment about the oddities here and there because they're part of this post's charm .. the concept is very unusual and you've carried it out so very well, especially in that first stanza.

[Simple_mee]

Its beautiful. Such a novel Idea.
nothing is missing, the beat, the flow...everything is just perect...
Cheers!

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Writer,

I've did something similar to this. Check out my poem "Queen Rises Seldom" or "Queen Rises Seldomly." I can't remember how I worded the title. Alright, using the A-Z method of writing is particularly hard, but can be done. Thank you for sharing this with me and sorry for taking so long to get to this review. Since this is a particular method of experimentation as well as it is entertainment for both the writer and the reader, I can't really critique it. What I would like to say though is that the words are too cluttered. Space out the words. Space it out, give room for imagination and personified weakness for the walls of the reader. I know how hard it is to find words for Q, U, V, W, X, Y, Z, and I, and J. They can be kinda tricky. So good job. I did have to pull out a dictionary.

Overall, the visual picture and from A-M are my favorites. It's a relatively good write! Keep experimenting and keep doing what you are doing. May God and America bless you richly. 9.8/10.

A Friend And Writer,
S. W. Scaggs

[Ian]

This poem is so cool. I like what you did alphabets shown and you fit the words so good for me took understand it and you talked about war how there's glory and honor and what the warrior had to do to get that. Keep it up because this is simply a good poem.

[An owl on the moon]

What an amazing poetic flow entranced in this alphabetical form! You've done so well to tell a story.. .giving it a rich history and beauty. Wonderful write!

[untoldtruth]

i have no idea how you were able to write a poem like this using the alphabet. ha my brain would have turned to mush trying to figure out words that are in order of the alphabet, that go together