Plausible

Plausible

A Poem by shallimarRose
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Plausible ....

Was it you?

........Was it me?

When did we stop

........When did we give up?

Stop trying?

You still sit in the garden of dreams

Throwing coins in the pool of probable cause

Sipping self pity cocktails

and eating regret baguettes

.......blaming me?

It's your boots on the wrong side of the door

All you had to do was open it...

bj smith

aka shallimaRose



© 2013 shallimarRose


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shallimarRose
Thoughts, comments welcome.. sR

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intriguing title ... love this style of writing .. i see him as an idiot (as we men are so much of the time) should have seen the plausibility of staying and making it better ... he's the looser ShallimarRose .. Happy New Year to you and all those dear to you!
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

thank you... Happy new year to you also...



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intriguing title ... love this style of writing .. i see him as an idiot (as we men are so much of the time) should have seen the plausibility of staying and making it better ... he's the looser ShallimarRose .. Happy New Year to you and all those dear to you!
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

thank you... Happy new year to you also...
So few words say so much. An opportunity lost through a lack of communication maybe?

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

Ha.. I actually cannot remember what this was about.. If I read it from someone else I might think h.. read more
Very well put I think and I love the images you create. Margaret

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thanks mags.. I appreciate.. Rose
I love the imagery - you still sit in the garden of dreams...throwing coins in the pool of probable cause. Some decisions aren't always the right ones...

beautiful poetry my friend.
:) Julie



Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Julie.. xo Rose
Very nice BJ!
Simplicity opening the door to the complexity of faltering or failed romance...
Some of this felt cliché at times, but I think it works well. You are describing a life situation that is all too common.
"Plausible..." indeed!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Yes it was meant to feel cliche' David.. Thank you for reading.. xo Rose
 David Scott

11 Years Ago

I thought as much. Well done. It was not a negative observation at all.
beautiful piece...especially love the imagery in the middle..."the pool of probably cause"

wow. "it's your boots on the wrong side of the door"---nice

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Jacob. I am glad you could feel the strength in those last lines... xo Rose
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ron
This is a very good poem about making the wrong decision about leaving some one Rose.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thanks you for reading Ron. Rose
ron

11 Years Ago

You are most welcome Rose.
R...good little piece. Liked the 'Throwing coins in the pool of probable cause' line very much. Well done...bobc

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you again bob.. xo Rose
Hmmm. Some people don't know if they will make the right decision or the wrong one. Will I go through the door and be on the right side of the door or stay where I am?

'All you had to do was open it' you say in this poem, and that seems like an invite to come in. What would've happened when the person steps in?

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Well the point of te poem was he shouldn't have left in the first place.. lol thanks for reading Ric.. read more
Richie

11 Years Ago

I may not comment on all your work, but I do love everything you write

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Added on September 25, 2013
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shallimarRose
shallimarRose

F W, WA



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I am a singer, writer, poet, dreamer, believer..... I am an unconventional poet who has been writing rhyme since the age of five. I enjoy all styles of poetry. I write by ear not syllable count .. more..

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