He Takes My Breath Away

Thanks for reading.. sR

 

Silently we sit alone

when not a word is spoken

for in his eyes I've found true love

our love a treasured token

~

the words he speaks are soft and pure

I trust him with my heart

I know that he has much to give

I've known it from the start

~

 in the kiss of love in bloom

he traces every line

within his velvet fingertips

his gift of love divine

~

I've never felt such tenderness

as he overtakes my all

and leads me into ecstasy

each night again I fall

~

caressed as only he could hold

protected in his arms

I was caught quite helpless

defenseless to his charms

~

I am just a woman

nothing special I can see

sometimes I stare at mirrored glare

and wonder what he sees in me

~

for crows have walked upon my face

and left the footprints there

I know he sees me gently age

but he doesn't seem to care

~

and if I cry he understands

as a woman that’s what I do

when filled with such emotion

the  tears come falling through

~

I know our love is timeless

forever and a day

he is my all, my everything

he  still takes my breath away

 

©bj smith

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Aethereal]

Ah, this is a beautiful way to grow old. Your first verse inspired me to write this gift poem for you: I use your first line as the jumping off point for the other lines:

Eyes

Silently we sit alone
without a word to say
as we reap the seeds we’ve sown
that loving eyes display.
Through our vision we have grown
to share our love that way.

[shallimarRose]

Lovely gift. Thank you.. Rose

[jo t]

I love this poem, it's so beautiful. I like that the title of the poem and the last line are the same signifying that he still takes her breath away regardless of how long they have been together. Incredibly emotive.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Jo for coming to read.. shallimarRose

[Twisted Words (Tom)]

This expresses true love so well. Esp crows feet stanza. If everyone could know love as this it would be a different world.

[shallimarRose]

Well I don't know how old you are but the crows feet will make sense soon lol.. Thank you for reading.. shallimarRose

[Pryde Foltz]

for crows have walked upon my face
and left the footprints there
I know he sees me gently age
but he doesn't seem to care

To be loved for what you possess inside is to be loved. Splendid write, Shallimar.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you so much.. xo Rose

[Larry Dyson]

Wow! Rose...hope I find this sometime....you have such a way of measuring things I suppose I may have and missed it.Great tenderness in this writing My friend..Laury

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Laury.. glad you liked this one.. Yes I have found this love.. xo Rose

[Chris]

Hey shall, it spoke well and with heart.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Chris.. Always an honor to have you visit my pages.. Vow renewal next month.. xo shall

[Antoñyo]

OmG!
Now that's just being selfish! What, you're trying to take over my favorites box or what?
...and how can I sleep with all that cha--chinging goin' off in my head? Hehe!

Seriously, this one humbled me...after it floored me! Brillant, brilliant, brilliant...

[shallimarRose]

Thank You Anton.. I don't mind taking over your favorites box? lol (jk) I feel humbled when someone adds me to their favs. ty, ty, ty.... xo Rose

[SyberRose]

Beautifully penned piece of true love Rose...lovely emotive read...Rose:)hugs

[shallimarRose]

Thanks SRose

[richom]

I rarely read romantic, erotic, or love poems. But after reading your devastating "Raped By a Friend" posting (I've never seen so many reviews on this site.), I went on to several of your recent poems.
This is splendid with wonderful rhymes and phrasing. You say you do not rely on syllable count, but it is clear here that you don't need to. Your "ear" has produced an excellent flow. I disagree with your saying you are "just a woman nothing special I can see."

[shallimarRose]

Awww, thank you Rich. Yes I am overwhelmed with the response and support on my story. I had almost pulled it the first day but now glad I did not. I had a great response on my breast cancer awareness blog as well. Thank you for this wonderful review. xo Rose

[MsJewel]

I love romantic poetry Rose and this is stunning. A beautiful tribute to true love,- a love that will last a life time. Gorgeous poetry my friend - and your presentation is as pretty as your poem!
:) Julie

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Julie.. I wrote this a few years ago about my husband.. xo