Churning

Song inspired pic from Google Images

 

 

 

There’s a color in the rainbow

that I cannot quite recall

it’s colors drawn from everything

yet with no color at all

 

 Cumulus clouds softly gather

just like cotton candy dreams

hovering in uncertainty

perhaps life's not what it seems

 

It's reminding me of something

is it something I forgot

I cannot get a sense of it

was it something I had sought?

 

Within the windmills of the mind

lie the circles of a storm

is this something quite the norm?

 

Like a world winds of emotions

and sandcastles washed away

then once upon a time was new

was it forever yesterday?

 

 Kaleidoscope within my brain

mirrored imaged every side

bursting into vibrant colors

of the things I've tried to hide

 

forgotten  fragments blown away

silent sounds on muted breeze

yet in my head a tempo pounds

and it brings me to my knees

 

 like wind chimed echo's haunting me

 in minds hollow how they dwell

they are my thoughts of yesterday

I thought I knew them well

 

Tunnel vision spectrums

in blinded light no longer seize

deafening, these silent sounds

a polaroid frame freeze

 

Still they're churning in my brain

thoughts continually stir

my life's become a mystery

filled with memories that blur

 

 

© bj smith

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

This song always boggled my mind.. Comments and critique welcome...thanx

Reviews

[Cassie]

Hi Shallimar...missed reading your writings and this is so good. I enjoyed reading. I hope you are doing great.

[shallimarRose]

saw your profile was closed and got worried. You and baby ok? thank you for reading Cassie.. xo

[Cassie]

We are doing good.Thank you dear. It was just temporal Wc is so addictive, I kept missing it

[Sheila Kline]

Beautiful - words, music, presentation! You have done a wonderful job of taking the words of the song and translating them into your thoughts......love it!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Sheila for reading. glad you enjoyed.. xo Rose

[kublakhan27]

The song that came to my mind upon reading this piece was Both Sides Now (Joni Mitchell)...actually that's the song I thought you were going to mention when you said it was inspired by one haha This is a beautiful and thought-provoking piece of introspection...I can't even really articulate how much it resonated with me...great work as always Rosebud...xo

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Steve.. I love Joni Mitchell.. xo Rose

[Strider Marcus Jones]

I like the imagery and rhythm in this excellent poem.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Marcus. I tried to make the song flow along with the tune. Appreciate your reading. Rose

[Stevo The POE-t]

Thanks for sharing this... I really enjoyed it...

[shallimarRose]

You're welcome and thank you for taking the time to read.. Rose

[Simon Welsh]

Oh, I love that first stanza!

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Elliott..

[Sue]

I like that song too - and if it inspired you to make a poem then all the better :) Enjoyed the twists and turns of this :)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Sue.. yes that song is unique for sure..

[Keith]

Stunning piece of work here! Amazing images are passing through our minds as your metaphors create the sense of being lost and longing for ..?
The title and music are wonderful.

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Keith.. A lot of versions of that song but I love this one. her voice is haunting..

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Lovely poem with great rhyme scheme.. I love the subtle questions. They make me look for answers myself. :) And anyway, the lines

"my life's become a mystery
filled with memories that blur"

made a great impact to me. Life is a mystery indeed and everything all happened in a blur. Life is short.

Brilliant piece! :x

[shallimarRose]

Thank you again Blue.. Glad you enjoyed. No idea of your age but I thought young. I am surprised that line made such an impact. sR

[FlatLineBeauty]

I think this was very beautiful Rose. :) I love seeing more of your talent daily while I drink my cocoa in the morning. It makes me smile ^.^

[shallimarRose]

Thank you and enjoy your cocoa... Rose